Some people believe that the government should support the funds for the arts, while some other people suggest that money should be used for public health and education. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
People have differing views with regard to question of whether the government should prioritise the art investment or finance medical systems and education. While a group of people argue that the funds from the government should be used for art, I believe that the investment in public health and education is more beneficial.
There are a variety of reasons elucidating why the government should place an emphasis on art development. It is evident that learning art can improve individuals’ thinking in philosophical and spiritual ways, further strengthening a sense of creative thinking skills. This is because when people visit art galleries, they could unconsciously gain in-deep knowledge of art works and a wide range of drawing techniques such as the colours or the textures utilised by artists. For example, numerous adolescents in Taiwan indicate that the unique and remarkable inspiration generally ensues from the observation of art.
Nevertheless, I believe other government investments can bring more advantages to individuals. Firstly, lengthening life expectancy has become the primary target for most people. Provided the government is able to enhance the current public health and reduce risk of fatal diseases such as AIDS, brain cancer, or heart disease, citizens can spend more time with their families, with them not feeling anxious or worried about their lives. In addition, investing money in education is vital as learning is recognised as a fundamental skill, increasing more possibilities of career exploration. For instance, the unemployment rate has plummeted in developing countries such as Africa and underprivileged students are able to gain tertiary education due to the educational subsidies from the government.
In conclusion, the government might need to spend money on the art industry, I still believe investing money in other areas should be the main focus.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 139, Rule ID: MAIN_FOCUS[1]
Message: Use simply 'focus'.
Suggestion: focus
...ting money in other areas should be the main focus.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, if, nevertheless, so, still, then, while, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, such as, with regard to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 13.0 24.0651302605 54% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 23.0 8.3376753507 276% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1621.0 1615.20841683 100% => OK
No of words: 292.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.55136986301 5.12529762239 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13376432452 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.12140015965 2.80592935109 111% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 176.041082164 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.606164383562 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 502.2 506.74238477 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.9689569757 49.4020404114 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 135.083333333 106.682146367 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.3333333333 20.7667163134 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.3333333333 7.06120827912 161% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.253176589922 0.244688304435 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.095053052566 0.084324248473 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.100032939674 0.0667982634062 150% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.17665988074 0.151304729494 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.112544986537 0.056905535591 198% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.9 13.0946893788 129% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 50.2224549098 77% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.21 12.4159519038 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.96 8.58950901804 116% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 78.4519038076 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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