In the new millennium, the crime rate has hit a new record in some of the metropolitan cities.

Essay topics:

In the new millennium, the crime rate has hit a new record in some of the metropolitan cities.

In the new millennium, the crime rate has hit a new record in some of the metropolitan cities. Regarding this, it is claimed that lawbreakers should be kept in a prison for a longer time span or rehabilitated them via the community service instead. I personally agree with the latter proposal, due to the fact that not only the expenditure of imprisonment could be avoided but also criminals could assimilate new skills and benefit their fellow citizens.
It is true to say that authorities have to allocate a great amount of revenue in order to look after criminals in a prison. As a case in point, in my country, the average expenditure of each prisoner per month is around $300, which is too much by considering a number of all prisoners. In such a context, lengthy jail could be quite expensive for the government and the burden should be shouldered by the taxpayers. In addition, around 65% of the offenders have spent some time in jail before, which shows that sentencing cannot deter them from recommitting new crimes. Therefore, it is obvious that lengthy jail is not a practical solution to be applied before reintroducing lawbreakers to the community.
On the other hand, if criminals are re-educated and spent considerable time in various rehabilitation programs, it is quite likely that they find an occupation after this period and do not recommit again. It is mainly due to the fact that they are exposed to new knowledge and can learn vocational skills, which can apply to earn a living. Statistics show that nearly half of the offenders which spent time in the rehabilitation classes do not commit a crime again in my hometown.
To sum up, by my reckoning lengthy sentencing only increase the expenses and would waste the public revenue, while via the rehabilitation programs criminals could gain new skills and do something beneficial to the welfare of their citizens and find a job.

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Average: 6.7 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 49, Rule ID: NEW_XX[1]
Message: Use simply 'record'.
Suggestion: record
...ew millennium, the crime rate has hit a new record in some of the metropolitan cities. Reg...
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Line 1, column 63, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
... the crime rate has hit a new record in some of the metropolitan cities. Regarding this, it...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, look, regarding, so, therefore, while, in addition, it is true, to sum up, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1580.0 1615.20841683 98% => OK
No of words: 324.0 315.596192385 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.87654320988 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24264068712 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92545706511 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 176.041082164 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.549382716049 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 498.6 506.74238477 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 42.1939964134 49.4020404114 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.666666667 106.682146367 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.0 20.7667163134 130% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.91666666667 7.06120827912 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 8.67935871743 12% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 3.9879759519 276% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.228137187567 0.244688304435 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.112551207495 0.084324248473 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.27012822949 0.0667982634062 404% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.140827953643 0.151304729494 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.147641552413 0.056905535591 259% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 13.0946893788 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 50.2224549098 105% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.32 12.4159519038 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.68 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 78.4519038076 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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