In the new millennium, many people select to travel by their own four-wheel vehicle or tram.

Essay topics:

In the new millennium, many people select to travel by their own four-wheel vehicle or tram.

In the new millennium, many people select to travel by their own four-wheel vehicle or tram. In such a context, it is asserted that authorities should devote far more revenue to enhance railways instead of roads. To some extent I agree that governments have to improve the railways, however, enough funds should be allocated to roads as well for a couple of cogent reasons.
According to the statistics, railways commute is the safest means of transportation in many countries. Therefore, it is of paramount importance to build adequate railways and encourage the public to use this way for their daily commute or even their travel. As a case in point, around two accidents happen per year in my country, Iran, in a railway, which is far lower than the car accidents. In addition to this, by traveling via the railways' fossil fuel could be saved. Also, far fewer greenhouse gases will be pumped into the air if individuals opt to select railways to travel instead of road travel.
On the other hand, it is true to say that many people travel by their private car for leisure purpose or going to work. As a result, new roads should be built and a great amount of money should be spent on equipping roads with speed cameras, road signs, and improve lighting, etc. Incontrovertibly, road space should be increased due to a higher number of cars which are produced each year. Consequently, an adequate budget should be given in this regard.
To sum up, it is crystal clear that promoting railroads is essential due to their safety and environmentally friendly way of commute; while building and equipping roads are important as well for the aforementioned reasons. Therefore, sufficient money should be allocated for both objectives.

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Average: 7.3 (1 vote)
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IELTS Writing Task II - IELTS Academic

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 436, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'railways'' or 'railway's'?
Suggestion: railways'; railway's
... addition to this, by traveling via the railways fossil fuel could be saved. Also, far f...
^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, however, if, so, therefore, well, while, in addition, as a result, it is true, to sum up, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1442.0 1615.20841683 89% => OK
No of words: 293.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.92150170648 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13729897018 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82946475028 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 176.041082164 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.576791808874 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 437.4 506.74238477 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.76152304609 210% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.2805854451 49.4020404114 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.0 106.682146367 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.9285714286 20.7667163134 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.07142857143 7.06120827912 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.246972656069 0.244688304435 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.110959992586 0.084324248473 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.25207515111 0.0667982634062 377% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.156089138853 0.151304729494 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.139235929297 0.056905535591 245% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 13.0946893788 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 50.2224549098 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 12.4159519038 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.4 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 78.4519038076 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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