New technologies have changed the way children spend
their free time. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?
It is true that many children now spend much of their spare time playing with the
latest technological devices. Despite some obvious disadvantages of this trend, I
believe that these are outweighed by the advantages.
On the one hand, there are two major drawbacks when children devote much of
their free time to playing electronic games or using the Internet. Firstly, exercise is
necessary for the physical development of children, so playing games in the street
or in the park with their friends is anintegral part of maintaining a healthy
lifestyle. Secondly, spending too much time on their computers or mobile phones
may lead to health problems for some youngsters. If they keep theireyes glued to
screens for hours on end, they may suffer from eye-strain. Waves from hi-
fidevices also tend to cause headaches if used for too long.
On the other hand, I believe that the benefits are more significant than such
disadvantages. One reason for this view is that new technologies encourage
children to use their free time to broadentheir knowledge, which is possible in
fun ways through interactive software. My young nephew, for example, spends
hours on the Internet learning about dinosaurs. Another reason is that the Internet
gives youngsters countless opportunities to discover friends with the same
interests in any part of the world, using chat rooms and social networks such as
Facebook. Consequently, new technologies both promote the habit of self-study
and encourage young people to develop a wide circle of virtual friends.
In conclusion, I would argue that the advantages of this modern trend are more
significant than the disadvantages.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, first, firstly, if, may, second, secondly, so, for example, in conclusion, such as, it is true, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.3376753507 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1433.0 1615.20841683 89% => OK
No of words: 267.0 315.596192385 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.3670411985 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.04229324003 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92005637427 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 162.0 176.041082164 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.606741573034 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 416.7 506.74238477 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.7008134196 49.4020404114 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.230769231 106.682146367 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5384615385 20.7667163134 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.2307692308 7.06120827912 145% => OK
Paragraphs: 22.0 4.38176352705 502% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.177337522808 0.244688304435 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0573409941815 0.084324248473 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0643986692662 0.0667982634062 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0445404686796 0.151304729494 29% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0478782278648 0.056905535591 84% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 13.0946893788 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.87 12.4159519038 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.53 8.58950901804 99% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 78.4519038076 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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