Nowadays a large amount of advertising is aimed at children. Some people think this can have negative effects on children and should be banned. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
A problem of modern societies is the declining level of health among children, with conflicting views on whether children-targeted advertisement is the main cause. One possible solution is to ban such marketing, especially on food and beverages.
Critics of this believe that advertising toward children means taking advantage of the strong market segment which is comprised of those children and their parents. If the children are exposed to forms of marketing such as premium toys offer or promotional cartoon characters, they would be more likely to ask their parents to pay for the advertised service or product. The variety of technological devices that are increasingly used by young children also open up commercial opportunities by means of social media. For instance, not only can influencers on YouTube and Instagram generate sales through product endorsement, but promotional messages can strategically be embedded in music videos and Facebook stories as well.
However, there are health potentials as far as the food and beverage industry is concerned. Children decide their food preferences at an early age and when they are exposed to food advertising, there will be long-lasting implications on their diet. Meals such as sugary drinks, processed food, high calories snacks, and fast food are among the commonly advertise food which children should be eating less of. A consequence of them failing to do so can lead to childhood obesity and diabetes, along with heart disease as well as stroke.
From a personal perspective, restricting or stopping food marketing aimed at children would contribute to better health of those children. On top of that, high tax penalties could be imposed on high-fat food products while, at the same time, encouraging the consumption of vegetables along with fruits.
To conclude, banning or limiting food marketing to children would bring the desired result as children would be less tempted into pestering their parents to buy them unhealthy food.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 17, Rule ID: BELIEVE_BELIEF[1]
Message: Did you mean 'belief' (noun) instead of believe (verb)?
Suggestion: belief
...ood and beverages. Critics of this believe that advertising toward children means ...
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Line 5, column 116, Rule ID: IS_COMPRISED_OF[1]
Message: Did you mean 'comprises' or 'consists of' or 'is composed of'?
Suggestion: comprises; consists of; is composed of
...tage of the strong market segment which is comprised of those children and their parents. If th...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, so, well, while, for instance, such as, as well as, on top of that
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 15.0 24.0651302605 62% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1702.0 1615.20841683 105% => OK
No of words: 314.0 315.596192385 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.42038216561 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20951839842 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97594041401 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 176.041082164 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.62101910828 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 508.5 506.74238477 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 5.43587174349 18% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.9639859307 49.4020404114 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.923076923 106.682146367 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.1538461538 20.7667163134 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.92307692308 7.06120827912 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.21189183665 0.244688304435 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0782865488089 0.084324248473 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0483613376544 0.0667982634062 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.122589762144 0.151304729494 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0227954472412 0.056905535591 40% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.2 13.0946893788 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 50.2224549098 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.45 12.4159519038 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.45 8.58950901804 110% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 78.4519038076 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.