Recently issues have arisen regarding whether or not advertisements targeted at children should be legally allowed. Personally, I view advertisements aimed at children to be unethical, since not only are they still naive, but bombarding them with commercials can cause a rift in the relationship between them and their parents.
Firstly, advertisements should not be aimed at children because they are highly suggestible, and as such cannot yet understand what is ultimately their best self-interests. Because they are incapable of making responsible fiscal decisions, marketing to this demographic means exploiting their inability to make rational choices for financial gain. For example, although children might want to buy lego sets advertised on TV, they often get bored of them as soon as they find out what they have bought is not like the advertisements. This exploitation of children’s naivety could be judged to be unethical.
Secondly, marketing to children inevitably leads to them pleading with their caretakers, who have disposable income to spend, which can lead to a deterioration in their relationship. Not buying children's toys could result in resentment in the relationship, for it is reasonable for caretakers whose duty it is to be fiscally responsible to refuse the child’s requests. This situation if repeated enough may in turn lead to negligence and subsequently stunt child development. Psychological studies have shown, for example, that children who have been neglected perform worse in cognitive tasks then those who have not.
In conclusion, I hold that not only are advertisements aimed at children unethical because it exploits their suggestibility, they can also affect children’s relationships with their parents and damage them psychologically. Therefore, I believe that such practices should be legally disallowed.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, may, regarding, second, secondly, so, still, then, therefore, for example, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 24.0651302605 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1585.0 1615.20841683 98% => OK
No of words: 280.0 315.596192385 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.66071428571 5.12529762239 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09062348924 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.35309596508 2.80592935109 120% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 176.041082164 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.6 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 480.6 506.74238477 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.2162885187 49.4020404114 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.083333333 106.682146367 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.3333333333 20.7667163134 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.91666666667 7.06120827912 140% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.67935871743 35% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.280121268783 0.244688304435 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.11810344804 0.084324248473 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0649346082913 0.0667982634062 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.194167454435 0.151304729494 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0381493973722 0.056905535591 67% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.9 13.0946893788 129% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 50.2224549098 79% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.84 12.4159519038 128% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.29 8.58950901804 108% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 78.4519038076 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 16.0 9.78957915832 163% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.7795591182 148% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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