Nowadays, most countries improve the standard of living through economic development. But some social values are lost as a result. Do you think th advantages of the phenomenon outweigh the disadvantages?
In this money-driven world, improving life conditions becomes tendency due to the development of national economy. However, it triggers some losing in ethic code whether this problem brings benefits or drawbacks for human life. I strongly argue that people need to keep the values of society instead of earning money.
To begin with this phenomenon, resident chase to have a high quality of life standard regardness moral principles, even violate the national issue. Futhermore, not only the individuals but also the organization or manufacture put the need before the greed to gain as much profit as they can. Due to the fact that, it triggers a number of serious problem such as environment pollution. For instance, in developing countries, Viet Nam is an example, the company cut forest to build the industrial area as well as emit carbondioxide without any stage to purify it. As a result, the air has been polluted which lead to housing effect especially losing the land because of rising sea level. Moreover, chasing the wealthy life means people try to get more cash even they have to cheat or steal the others, this occur the booming criminals. To conclude, inforcing people to earn money not a best way to develop the country, I believe that remaining ethic code is more crucial.
Although the violation of moral principles to get more cash, I still argue that enhance people to improve living standard play a vital role in the development of nation. Indeed, provided that resident had an advanced life conditions, these country would become wealthier due to the upgraded welfare. Particularly, the government put more concentration to the old and the unemployed, then it could decrease the number of homeless people. Especially, health care services and education has been focused on more by the gorvernors focus more on health care services and education which leghthen the life expectancy of the elder.
In con clusion, I firmly believe that beside developing national finance we still have to remain the social values which are losing day by day in this money-worship world. If people to put the moral principles as a first priority, this phenomenon could be encountered
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, moreover, so, still, then, well, for instance, such as, as a result, as well as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1833.0 1615.20841683 113% => OK
No of words: 360.0 315.596192385 114% => OK
Chars per words: 5.09166666667 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35587717469 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77176989184 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 176.041082164 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.588888888889 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 577.8 506.74238477 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 29.4785409239 49.4020404114 60% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 114.5625 106.682146367 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5 20.7667163134 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.8125 7.06120827912 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0699893126156 0.244688304435 29% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.022793527198 0.084324248473 27% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0235103823185 0.0667982634062 35% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.046150871609 0.151304729494 31% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0102271979274 0.056905535591 18% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 13.0946893788 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.54 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.25 8.58950901804 108% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 78.4519038076 131% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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