Nowadays, sport is becoming a big business with high earning for professional sportsmen and a lot of companies have involved in financially and in other ways.
What are the advantages and disadvantages?
It is true that thanks to the involvement of business firms, sports has transformed into a prosperous industry with a higher income for athletes. While the advantages stemming from this tendency can be witnessed, its disadvantages are also discernible.
On the one hand, there are two major positive impacts when more money is poured into sports. To begin with, the uplifted earning is believed to assure a good living for sports professions. As a result, not only does it come to people’s knowledge that sports are no longer an unstable occupation, but also inspire gifted youngsters to pursue the industry, which can contribute to more talented athletes. In addition, besides professionals, amateur players and citizens can take the advantage from this tendency as well. Indeed, it is obvious that an enormous influx of money enables organizations to channel their budget into upgrading and expanding sports infrastructure, and this can provide residents with sufficient facilities to exploit and build up their strengths.
On the other hand, sports commercialization is considered to pose challenges to the Olympic ideal. Particularly, financial interest is always distributed unequally, in which winners receive a more favorable treatment, so this accidentally form a win-at-all-cost attitude among competitors. Consequently, if the competitive spirit is taken to extreme, it is thought to diminish sportsmanship, which is overshadowed by cheating. For example, statistics have indicated that when sponsorship for tournaments expanded, incidence of athletes using performance-enhancing drugs increased in a proportional manner. In fact, sports agendas have strictly punished moral character erosion by disqualifying them from participating. However, since the rewards remain abundant, making competitors more likely to turn into crime despite jeopardizing their careers, that measure is not believed to resolve the problem thoroughly.
In conclusion, a massive investment in sports may be beneficial, but its drawbacks should not be overlooked.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, consequently, however, if, look, may, so, well, while, for example, in addition, in conclusion, in fact, as a result, it is true, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1760.0 1615.20841683 109% => OK
No of words: 302.0 315.596192385 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.82781456954 5.12529762239 114% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1687104957 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.43124335917 2.80592935109 122% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 176.041082164 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.655629139073 0.561755894193 117% => OK
syllable_count: 543.6 506.74238477 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.302895556 49.4020404114 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.714285714 106.682146367 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5714285714 20.7667163134 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 13.0 7.06120827912 184% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.168350722686 0.244688304435 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0543385385167 0.084324248473 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0507469695891 0.0667982634062 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0967608617055 0.151304729494 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0497844006121 0.056905535591 87% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.8 13.0946893788 128% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 33.24 50.2224549098 66% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.53 12.4159519038 133% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.69 8.58950901804 124% => OK
difficult_words: 115.0 78.4519038076 147% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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