It is true that thanks to the involvement of business firms, sports has transformed into a prosperous industry with a higher income for athletes. While the advantages stemming from this tendency can be witnessed, its disadvantages are also discernible.
On the one hand, there are two major positive impacts when more money is poured into sports. To begin with, in comparison to their predecessors, present sports professionals are paid a significantly higher income. As a result, not only does it assure them a decent life and bring about job satisfaction, but also stimulates gifted youngsters to pursue the industry, which can contribute to more talented successors for a nations’ sports. In addition, besides professionals, amateur players and citizens can take the advantage from this tendency as well. Indeed, it is obvious that an enormous influx of money motivates organizations to channel their budget into upgrading and expanding sports infrastructure, and this can provide residents with sufficient facilities to exploit and build up their strengths.
On the other hand, sports commercialization is considered to pose challenges to the Olympic ideal. Particularly, financial interest is always distributed unequally, in which winners receive a more favorable treatment, so this accidentally form a win-at-all-cost attitude among competitors. Consequently, if the competitive spirit is taken to extreme, it is thought to diminish sportsmanship, which is overshadowed by cheating. For example, statistics have indicated that when sponsorship for tournaments expanded, incidence of athletes using performance-enhancing drugs increased in a proportional manner. In fact, sports agendas have strictly punished moral character erosion by disqualifying offending players from participating. However, since the rewards remain abundant, many competitors are still driven by greed and likely to turn into crime even at the expense of their career, making that measure unable to resolve the problem thoroughly.
In conclusion, a massive investment in sports may be beneficial, but its drawbacks should not be overlooked.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, consequently, however, if, look, may, so, still, well, while, for example, in addition, in conclusion, in fact, as a result, it is true, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1821.0 1615.20841683 113% => OK
No of words: 313.0 315.596192385 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.8178913738 5.12529762239 114% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20616286096 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.46082344847 2.80592935109 123% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 176.041082164 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.661341853035 0.561755894193 118% => OK
syllable_count: 562.5 506.74238477 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 10.0 4.76152304609 210% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.4121786387 49.4020404114 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.071428571 106.682146367 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.3571428571 20.7667163134 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 13.5 7.06120827912 191% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.16028106181 0.244688304435 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.050622288757 0.084324248473 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0451168453059 0.0667982634062 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0928363067187 0.151304729494 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0504799899153 0.056905535591 89% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.2 13.0946893788 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 32.22 50.2224549098 64% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.77 12.4159519038 135% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.58 8.58950901804 123% => OK
difficult_words: 116.0 78.4519038076 148% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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