Nowadays technology is increasingly being used to monitor what people are saying and doing (for example, through cell phone tracking and security cameras). In many cases, the people being monitored are unaware that this is happening. Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?
The usage of technology has been growing rapidly these past years. Now some governments are using it to check what people are doing or what they say on their phones, sometimes even without them knowing that they are being monitored. I believe this kind of usage of technology has more disadvantages rather than being useful.
Some people, especially authorities think that checking and tracking individuals have many advantages and logical reasons. First of all, they say it is for the sake of the nation's security. For example, governments believe they can fight international crimes and they will be able to reduce the terrorist attacks with these technologies, hence their country will be safer. Moreover, some people say that with this way of monitoring, even the rate of local crimes, such as burglary will reduce, because if a thief does not know whether he is being watched or not, he won't commit the crime.
On the other hand, the majority part of societies, sees the action of monitoring them without their knowledge as spying. In other words, they always feel that they are being watched, and as a result they feel unsafe, even in their homes. Also, social activists believe that this is against of freedom of speech and against the basic human right, which is having a safe personal space. For instance, the rivals of the current governments, or the critics of them might feel threatened in their personal lives.
In conclusion, although checking actions of individuals may has some safety benefits, in my opinion it is the wrong method of using technology, and drawbacks are more crucial and more considerable.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 173, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'nations'' or 'nation's'?
Suggestion: nations'; nation's
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, hence, if, may, moreover, so, for example, for instance, in conclusion, kind of, such as, as a result, first of all, in my opinion, in other words, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 24.0651302605 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 31.0 41.998997996 74% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.3376753507 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1361.0 1615.20841683 84% => OK
No of words: 271.0 315.596192385 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.0221402214 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.05734859645 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61691006679 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 159.0 176.041082164 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.586715867159 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 416.7 506.74238477 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.4076143178 49.4020404114 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.416666667 106.682146367 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5833333333 20.7667163134 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 14.8333333333 7.06120827912 210% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.206008059585 0.244688304435 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0690503815939 0.084324248473 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0514157117247 0.0667982634062 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.113325581462 0.151304729494 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0790798045675 0.056905535591 139% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 13.0946893788 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 50.2224549098 115% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 12.4159519038 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.81 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 78.4519038076 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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