Some people do not go directly to college after high school but travel or work for a short time. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?
These days, there are an increasing number of students spending a certain amount of time traveling or doing jobs instead of entering colleges after graduating from high school. While this trend can bring about some minus points, in my opinion, its positive sides are more significant.
On the one hand, the fact that students invest time in their interests such as traveling or working after high school has many negative aspects. One of the primary drawbacks is that due to the familiarity with their current habits, they might have difficulty in getting back to an academic schedule. Consequently, they often lose motivation towards the study, which contributes to their poor academic performance. Moreover, these individuals might suffer from peer pressure. To illustrate, students who attend colleges later as opposed to their fellows are likely to start their careers later. These young individuals seem to be afraid of being inferior to their friends.
On the other hand, there are several advantages of taking a break from classroom learning after high school. Firstly, these young individuals might gain knowledge and experience associated with the places they visit or the jobs they do. As a result, they can discover their interests for career, which assists in choosing college or university to enroll in. For example, when traveling to mountainous areas, these students are interested in the local cultural practices; therefore, they might choose to study tourism at university. Secondly, highschool graduates can earn an amount of money from working; it can be used for paying tuition fees and accommodation when they enter universities. Finally, students can acquire some basic soft skills from working or traveling such as communication skills or time management skills, which are necessary for their future and future career.
In conclusion, allocating time to travel and work before studying in colleges can make students suffer from peer pressure and find it hard to start studying again. However, I believe the advantages are greater, as this trend can assist highschool graduates in broadening their horizons, acquiring skills and raising their income.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 525, Rule ID: COMP_THAN[3]
Message: Comparison requires 'than', not 'then' nor 'as'.
Suggestion: than
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, finally, first, firstly, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, while, for example, in conclusion, such as, as a result, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1838.0 1615.20841683 114% => OK
No of words: 340.0 315.596192385 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.40588235294 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29407602571 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71828996724 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 176.041082164 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.573529411765 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 557.1 506.74238477 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 5.43587174349 221% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.7191737726 49.4020404114 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.875 106.682146367 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.25 20.7667163134 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.8125 7.06120827912 167% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.188818819949 0.244688304435 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.065129162408 0.084324248473 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0691418016202 0.0667982634062 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.129469430548 0.151304729494 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.049939697955 0.056905535591 88% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 13.0946893788 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.1 12.4159519038 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.95 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 78.4519038076 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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