Nowadays young children spend too much of their free time in shopping mall. Some people fear that this may have negative effects on young children and the society they live in. To what extend do you agree or disagree?
Young children tend to go shopping in their leisure time. Some individuals assume that this could create negative effects on them, thus this remains a source of controversy. Personally, although I agree with its benefits but I believe that it would be adverse if people over crazy about it.
In the one hand, going shopping brings people countless advantages based on many reasons. One reason is that they could stand a chance to relax their brain after once stressful day. As usual, young children have to suffer from pressure about learning or society, thus they seek pleasure in order to remove anything that makes them exhausted. In particular, they believe that going shopping means find happiness for themselves, even they could burn maximize calories from their body. According to the scientists, people could consume 300 calories when they go shopping in hour. Another reason is that shopping helps young children build the relationship. As far as I know, education in countries is purely difficult so young children find it hard to spend time for family member or friends. Therefore, shopping is the best choice to reinforce sentimental each other. Especially, in the shopping pathways, they could have an opportunity to get to know about hobby or character. Besides that, if you pay attention to this, you could investigate their point of view. For example, people disliking with waiting for someone means they are not patient.
In the other hand, I strongly presumed that going shopping brings negative aspects as well. If young children use their average time to go shopping, this definitely well. In contrast, they could a mount of time to advocate currency to producer, that completely terrible. Nowadays, young children have a tendency to crazy shopping so they are never sufficient to the shopping feeling, even repetitive shopping behave. Over shopping find it easy to lead to over control, extraordinary offense. For instance, Alan – a friendly person became murderer since he killed his mom when she prevent him from over shopping.
In conclusion, in my opinion, I purely about shopping benefit but I think people should measure to frequency that they spend for shopping in order to guarantee with its advantages.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: The pronoun 'she' must be used with a third-person verb: 'prevents'.
Suggestion: prevents
...rderer since he killed his mom when she prevent him from over shopping. In conclusion,...
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Line 4, column 181, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...order to guarantee with its advantages.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, if, so, therefore, thus, well, for example, for instance, i think, in conclusion, in contrast, in particular, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 24.0651302605 212% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 53.0 41.998997996 126% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1876.0 1615.20841683 116% => OK
No of words: 364.0 315.596192385 115% => OK
Chars per words: 5.15384615385 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.36792674256 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64142315624 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 176.041082164 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.557692307692 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 565.2 506.74238477 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.76152304609 210% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 16.0721442886 131% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.0224847139 49.4020404114 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.3333333333 106.682146367 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.3333333333 20.7667163134 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.52380952381 7.06120827912 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.9879759519 226% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.314020856077 0.244688304435 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.100032288227 0.084324248473 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0698498109642 0.0667982634062 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.197095643391 0.151304729494 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0577554003616 0.056905535591 101% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 13.0946893788 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 50.2224549098 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.29 12.4159519038 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.17 8.58950901804 95% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 78.4519038076 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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