Today many children spend a lot of time playing computer games and little time on sport. Why is it? Is it a negative or positive development?
It is widely argued that children are not interested in joining outside activities, but crazy about play computer games. Some causes for this situation can be identified, I think it has a bad effect for them.
In the one hand, computer games hold appeal for children because of two major reasons. One reason is that it is various about types, hence it could make an impression for them. As far as I know, currently, creative firms generate software that acclimatize to every gender. For instance, boy’s games always involve in flight or action. By contrast, girl’s games related to fashion or cooking. Another reason is that instead of sport, playing computer games would save time on moving. Many people assume that playing computer games are not only time-saving but also relaxing effectively.
In the other hand, this situation is not as well as they expected. First of all, it results in countless diseases. According to the statistics in Vietnam, 500 children have to conduct eye surgery because they use computer from 5 to 9 hours per day. Additionally, adolescents find it easy to be over-weighted due to lack of acting. A scientist said that every person should maintain the habit of going to gym or doing exercise at least 4 times a week in order to exchange nutrients in body. Secondly, playing computer games leads to out of control, then create bad habit for them. For example, there were approximately 783 children who plays truant per year in the world because of computer games.
In conclusion, I supposed that children should join in outside activities with friends instead of playing computer games to protect their health
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Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, if, second, secondly, so, then, well, at least, for example, for instance, i suppose, i think, in conclusion, as well as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1379.0 1615.20841683 85% => OK
No of words: 276.0 315.596192385 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.99637681159 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07593519647 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68564792721 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 176.041082164 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.619565217391 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 420.3 506.74238477 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 29.2008911084 49.4020404114 59% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 81.1176470588 106.682146367 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.2352941176 20.7667163134 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.35294117647 7.06120827912 132% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.252885253583 0.244688304435 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0780127129493 0.084324248473 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0843116521344 0.0667982634062 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.147758737043 0.151304729494 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0614181874823 0.056905535591 108% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 13.0946893788 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 50.2224549098 127% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 11.3001002004 74% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.42 12.4159519038 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.03 8.58950901804 93% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 78.4519038076 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 9.78957915832 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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