One of the consequences of improved medical care is that people are living longer and life expectancy is increasing.Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages ?

Nowadays, medical service developed ,and so, life of human being is extended and they also anticipating that they will live more than present. I think the drawbacks are for more than that of the benefit of this development, because it can cause overpopulated world and less employment, despite the senior citizens are director for us.

One of the major shortcomings of the rising willing of live longer is that it can make world more populated. As we can observe from the world, the population is being increase day by day and creating numerous problems for welcoming generation. Provided that people alive more than 80 or 90 years, they could congest the whole world through themselves, because the population of the globe is increasing about 3% in a year. As a result of this, the entire globe can face various difficulties such as food, accommodation, and capital.

In other words, much more older people can a reason of unemployment. The retirement time of an employee is approximately 60. Suppose that the people are living more than 80 or 90 years, logically, the time of retirement will be increased and they will hold their job till the end. Therefore, there would lack of free vacancies, where are new staff can add. Because of this, the young citizen will suffer from unemployment problem.

On the other hand, the older people are guide for new comers. They can guide the freshers to a brighter way from their life experience. For example, in one parts of India having a huge amount of aged people who are guiding the youngsters in several sectors. Consequently, the region is developing both economically and socially.

To conclude, despite the development of rising anticipation of lifetime, and extended life through the developed medical aid have some demerits, say, giving guidance, its shortcomings are more, such as, overpopulation ,and unemployment.

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, if, so, therefore, for example, i think, such as, as a result, in other words, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.3376753507 168% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1571.0 1615.20841683 97% => OK
No of words: 309.0 315.596192385 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.08414239482 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1926597562 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89049126036 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.563106796117 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 492.3 506.74238477 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 7.0 2.52805611222 277% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 6.0 2.10420841683 285% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 0.809619238477 494% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.8085417668 49.4020404114 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.1875 106.682146367 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.3125 20.7667163134 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.25 7.06120827912 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.144679195181 0.244688304435 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0474472429993 0.084324248473 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.034177524575 0.0667982634062 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0857275120215 0.151304729494 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0194537738243 0.056905535591 34% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 13.0946893788 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.18 12.4159519038 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.16 8.58950901804 95% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 78.4519038076 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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