The only way to solve incresing crime rate of young offenders is to teach parents better parenting skills. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Essay topics:

The only way to solve incresing crime rate of young offenders is to teach parents better parenting skills. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It would no doubt that the crime rate of young offenders are rising and becoming a topic of grave concern. Some people argue that teaching better parenting skills to parents is solution of emerging crimes of young offenders. I could not less agree on it owing to some reasons that would be discussed in upcoming paragraphs.

One of the plausible reason of my assertion is that it is impossible for parents to keep children under their surveillance all the time. They have to do their daily jobs to survive, where as children spend time in school or college and at home. Moreover, parents may have not any clue that their children whom with interaction and spend time. A recent study revealed that more than 70 percentage teenagers are spent of their time with friends than family.

nevertheless, now a days materialistic and consumerism culture of the communities are widen the gap between parents and children's. Parents living ways considered old fashioned by children's and their given suggestion seems to trapped them into cages. Moreover, teenagers does not want support from parents, they wish to achieve everything by own, which sometimes lead them to wrong path.

In conclusion, i would like to say that teaching better parenting skills to parents is not enough to handle this issue, this is issue only solve with the support of both government and societies.

Votes
Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

Comments

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
may, moreover, nevertheless, so, in conclusion, no doubt

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1143.0 1615.20841683 71% => OK
No of words: 229.0 315.596192385 73% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.99126637555 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.89008302616 4.20363070211 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64531522603 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 145.0 176.041082164 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.633187772926 0.561755894193 113% => OK
syllable_count: 342.9 506.74238477 68% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 26.2832630652 49.4020404114 53% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 103.909090909 106.682146367 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8181818182 20.7667163134 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.09090909091 7.06120827912 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.67935871743 35% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.262946197313 0.244688304435 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.091242595591 0.084324248473 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0875162318817 0.0667982634062 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.156805039598 0.151304729494 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0870394618002 0.056905535591 153% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 13.0946893788 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 50.2224549098 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.66 12.4159519038 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.66 8.58950901804 89% => OK
difficult_words: 44.0 78.4519038076 56% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum 250 words wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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