Organized tour to remote areas and community is increasingly popular. Is it a positive or negative development for the local people and the environment?
Organized tour to distant areas and community is becomming more and more prevalent. Personally, I opine that although this phenomenon has an adverse impact on the environment, it brings advantages for local people.
The positive aspects of organized tour for local people can be attributed to far-reaching employment opportunities and the development of tourism industry in remote areas. With regard to the former, many people gravitate toward rural areas to find a job to support their family, hence, organized tour can create job opportunies for job seekers in far- flung areas. To illustrate, many people in local areas can become tour guide, which is a well-paid job to raise income for them. On the second point, organized tour can assist local people to develop the tourism industry, thus, the local people can promote the image of local culture to everyone in different regions of country. For instance, in a village in Hue, thanks to organized tour, they can promote their traditional activities for tourists such as wrestling in festivals,etc.
However, organized tour has a debilitating effect on the environment in faraway areas. Since tourists do not foster their awareness in protecting the environment in remote areas, for example, many tourists use cars to go sightseeing around, as a result, the air in distant areas is becoming contaminated due to the exhaust fumes from cars. In addition, the local people have to encounter a new problem in their areas-water pollution. As many visitors discharge trash on the lakes and rivers, overtime, the amount of trash on rivers and lakes increase, which leads to polluted water in faraway areas.
In conclusion, organized tour can be beneficial for local people in some aspects, however, it has had a negative impact on the environment in terms of air pollution and water pollution.
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Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 13.1623246493 38% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 11.0 24.0651302605 46% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 41.998997996 114% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1552.0 1615.20841683 96% => OK
No of words: 298.0 315.596192385 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.20805369128 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.15483772266 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87526522748 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 154.0 176.041082164 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.51677852349 0.561755894193 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 498.6 506.74238477 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.9735346625 49.4020404114 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.333333333 106.682146367 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.8333333333 20.7667163134 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.25 7.06120827912 173% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.431602367592 0.244688304435 176% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.164927210836 0.084324248473 196% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0836667202922 0.0667982634062 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.245823437411 0.151304729494 162% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0700513804257 0.056905535591 123% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.5 13.0946893788 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 50.2224549098 77% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.23 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.38 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 78.4519038076 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 9.78957915832 128% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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