The increase in the production of consumer goods results in damage to the natural environment. What are the causes of this? What can be done to solve this problem?
Many people have recently taken notice that environmental erosion has been coupled with the proliferation in the production of consumer products. I believe a large number of the environmental issues today are the direct effect of overpopulation, hence the requirement for government intervention in the form of sex education.
A factor behind the increased consumption of consumer products is a booming global population. As a population grows, more natural resources are needed towards housing and infrastructure projects; this leads to environmental degradation as forests are chopped down and fossil fuel burnt in order to cater to the needs of extra people. The country of Vietnam, for example, has experienced a population boom in recent years, which could be said to have contributed significantly to its major cities of Hanoi and Saigon being ranked two of the most polluted in the world.
Thus, some argue that we must push for government intervention in education to improve sex education and decrease birth rates. Teaching children on how to prevent unwanted pregnancies through the use of contraception or birth control will not only help to improve the environment, but can also make the lives of would-be parents more comfortable as well. These benefits to the population are why countries such as India and China have launched massive campaigns to curb their population growth primarily, aimed at educating their young citizens to be more responsible.
In conclusion, it is our responsibility to curb the emission of greenhouse gases and the depletion of our natural resources, and we must pressure multinationals and governments into accepting this responsibility of preventing the overpopulation that have made the issue ever more pressing.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, if, so, thus, well, as for, for example, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 15.0 24.0651302605 62% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 22.0 8.3376753507 264% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1492.0 1615.20841683 92% => OK
No of words: 274.0 315.596192385 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.44525547445 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0685311056 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.24759282896 2.80592935109 116% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 176.041082164 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.642335766423 0.561755894193 114% => OK
syllable_count: 470.7 506.74238477 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 16.0721442886 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 20.2975951904 148% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 58.9452560422 49.4020404114 119% => OK
Chars per sentence: 165.777777778 106.682146367 155% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.4444444444 20.7667163134 147% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.0 7.06120827912 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.115106905173 0.244688304435 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.04629179491 0.084324248473 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0359201229349 0.0667982634062 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0641755810191 0.151304729494 42% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.033904342335 0.056905535591 60% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.5 13.0946893788 149% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 32.57 50.2224549098 65% => OK
smog_index: 13.0 7.44779559118 175% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.2 11.3001002004 143% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.92 12.4159519038 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.97 8.58950901804 116% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 78.4519038076 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 9.78957915832 158% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 10.1190380762 138% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.7795591182 148% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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