Some people think that zoos are all cruel and should be closed down. Others however believe that zoos can be useful in protecting wild animals. Discuss both opinions and give your own opinion.
It is thought that zoos are cruel and should be banned. However, some individuals say that animals can be beneficial from zoos in term of protection. Personally, I am not in favor of the former view since zoos can have many advantages besides protecting animals.
On the one hand there is reason why some people claim that zoos can come in handy for animals with regard to protection. The main reason is that nowadays, illegal hunting poses a great threat to wild animals, which drive wild animals to the egdge of extinction. To illustrate, bengal tigers, which were once the biggest wild animals with the total population of about 40000, now, due to illegal hunting, the figure has reduced to just 20000.Hence, a growing number of individuals opine that let wild animals live in zoos can protect them.
On the other hand, I am of the opinion that although zoos can be cruel to some extent , they should not be prohibited as zoos can benefits for people. With regard to the former, for animal lovers, wild animals which are kept in zoos are cruel since they restrict the freedom of animals. It goes without saying that wild animals are belong to nature and those animals which once roamed in the forest, now, they are kept in the zoos as a way of entertainment for people. Therefore, for some people, especial animal lovers, deem that zoos are no more than public prisons for animals. On the second point, zoos can help children to discover nature and expose themselves to wild animals. This can serve as an inspiration for children to learn and know more about wild animals, which can influence their choice of career in the future. To illustrate, when they hear staffs of the zoo talking about each animals in the zoos, children can show their interest in them and want to become a zoologist or zookeeper in the future.
In conclusion, I am subscribe to the view that although zoos can be cruel to some extent, they can bring advantage for children and protection for animals, hence, they should not be prohibited.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 308, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...lustrate, bengal tigers, which were once the biggest wild animals with the total ...
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Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Hence
...g, the figure has reduced to just 20000.Hence, a growing number of individuals opine ...
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Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...lthough zoos can be cruel to some extent , they should not be prohibited as zoos c...
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Line 5, column 333, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'belonged'.
Suggestion: belonged
...es without saying that wild animals are belong to nature and those animals which once ...
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Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'subscribed'.
Suggestion: subscribed
...r in the future. In conclusion, I am subscribe to the view that although zoos can be c...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, hence, however, second, so, therefore, in conclusion, talking about, with regard to, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 7.85571142285 191% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 7.30460921844 205% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 41.998997996 124% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1676.0 1615.20841683 104% => OK
No of words: 353.0 315.596192385 112% => OK
Chars per words: 4.74787535411 5.12529762239 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33454660006 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.450538514 2.80592935109 87% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 176.041082164 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.475920679887 0.561755894193 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 512.1 506.74238477 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 5.43587174349 184% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 52.4329017285 49.4020404114 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.714285714 106.682146367 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.2142857143 20.7667163134 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.92857142857 7.06120827912 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.345719506622 0.244688304435 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.154971442402 0.084324248473 184% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0906643213614 0.0667982634062 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.245510882401 0.151304729494 162% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0461143794081 0.056905535591 81% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 13.0946893788 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 50.2224549098 109% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.57 12.4159519038 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.65 8.58950901804 89% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 78.4519038076 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 308, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...lustrate, bengal tigers, which were once the biggest wild animals with the total ...
^^
Line 3, column 443, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Hence
...g, the figure has reduced to just 20000.Hence, a growing number of individuals opine ...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 86, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...lthough zoos can be cruel to some extent , they should not be prohibited as zoos c...
^^
Line 5, column 333, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'belonged'.
Suggestion: belonged
...es without saying that wild animals are belong to nature and those animals which once ...
^^^^^^
Line 7, column 21, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'subscribed'.
Suggestion: subscribed
...r in the future. In conclusion, I am subscribe to the view that although zoos can be c...
^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, hence, however, second, so, therefore, in conclusion, talking about, with regard to, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 7.85571142285 191% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 7.30460921844 205% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 41.998997996 124% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1676.0 1615.20841683 104% => OK
No of words: 353.0 315.596192385 112% => OK
Chars per words: 4.74787535411 5.12529762239 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33454660006 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.450538514 2.80592935109 87% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 176.041082164 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.475920679887 0.561755894193 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 512.1 506.74238477 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 5.43587174349 184% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 52.4329017285 49.4020404114 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.714285714 106.682146367 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.2142857143 20.7667163134 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.92857142857 7.06120827912 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.345719506622 0.244688304435 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.154971442402 0.084324248473 184% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0906643213614 0.0667982634062 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.245510882401 0.151304729494 162% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0461143794081 0.056905535591 81% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 13.0946893788 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 50.2224549098 109% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.57 12.4159519038 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.65 8.58950901804 89% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 78.4519038076 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.