Out of a country’s health budget, a large proportion should be diverted from
treatment to spending on health education and preventative measures. To
what extent do you agree or disagree with the above statement
In this world, many people are dying from various types of health-related
problems due to the lacking of appropriate health education and preventive
actions. That is why the government expends a huge amount of money finding an
appropriate approach to this matter. By this, I mean that more money needs to be
spent on programmes to prevent major illnesses and educate the public on their
dangers.
There is a lot of ignorance about many common health problems, like heart
disease for example. Many of these can be predicted/avoided, or their
symptoms/effects radically reduced, if more people are made aware of them
through public education programmes. This has already been proven in many
countries. The UK, for instance, has seen a remarkable decrease in the number of
women dying from breast cancer because social marketing campaigns provide
information on potential threats and promote regular self-examination to discover
this critical disease. With public awareness at its highest level ever, citizens are
more health conscious and have the tendency to perform periodic medical checkup, which is beneficial in the long run.
Although I am strongly in favour of spending money on such programmes, I do not
believe that the current health budget should suffer/ be maximized for this sole
purpose. The day to day treatment which patients are currently undergoing/
experiencing is just as important. We must find the money for this crucial cause
elsewhere. At the moment our government spends billions of dollars on weapons.
If they diverted/ reallocated only a fraction of this into the health budget, medical
facilities could be extensively improved and aids are given to more
underprivileged people. Ultimately this would result in a significant reduction in
the number of patients whose illnesses have not been prevented and in need of
urgent medication, which, along with health-protecting and preventive programs,
can improve the health of the nation as a whole.
In the end, whilst it is important to invest in a range of treatments available to
people currently receiving them, I firmly believe that the government should also
place an importance on disbursing the money to implement programmes which
keep us in good health.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, so, for example, for instance, i mean
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 41.998997996 129% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.3376753507 180% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1934.0 1615.20841683 120% => OK
No of words: 356.0 315.596192385 113% => OK
Chars per words: 5.43258426966 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34372677135 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.05847154654 2.80592935109 109% => OK
Unique words: 214.0 176.041082164 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.601123595506 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 578.7 506.74238477 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 69.9446130084 49.4020404114 142% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.933333333 106.682146367 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.7333333333 20.7667163134 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.13333333333 7.06120827912 44% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 29.0 4.38176352705 662% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.218423351879 0.244688304435 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0686062921971 0.084324248473 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0586586499919 0.0667982634062 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0545471096565 0.151304729494 36% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0522889323403 0.056905535591 92% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 13.0946893788 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.51 12.4159519038 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.52 8.58950901804 111% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 78.4519038076 136% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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