Parents and teachers believe that children should be supervised in their activities most of the time whereas others believe that kids need more freedom.
To what extend do you agree or disagree.
One of the most discussed issues nowadays is that children ought to be under supervision by parents and teachers most of the time when they have activities while there are others who argue that children should get more freedom. In my opinion, I believe that children should be under supervision of their parents and teachers as they can face many problems when they are alone.
Firstly, it must be admitted that when children are alone they may face danger situations. Nowadays, there are many bad people who can threaten our children. According to recent research, approximately 100 000 children are kidnaped around the world every year, and this happens when children have activities without supervision. In addition, children can be influenced by older children from bad companies, who can learn them to smoke and consume alcohol drinks. As a result, children under bad influence are tend to commit major crimes that will have dire consequences in their future life.
Another point to consider, is that nowadays there are many different activities such as video games and violence movies which can effect children’s academic performances. When children play video games without parents control they can become addicted to them. As a result, they will spend all free time on video games and will not have desire to study. Consequently, their academic performance will be weak and they will suffer with their study. Finally, with poor academic results they will not be able to enter to the university and succeed in their future life.
Finally, according to law in Uzbekistan all children should be under supervision from their birth to mature ages. This conception is realized by simple instructions, when children are at home parents should be responsible for them and if children are at school, school’s administration should be responsible for them. In all other cases neighborhood community is responsible for children, and this community should check parents and schools. This law helped to our country to decrease the number of crimes committed by children.
In conclusion, children should be supervised by older people as this will help to prevent danger situations.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...will help to prevent danger situations.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, finally, first, firstly, if, may, while, in addition, in conclusion, such as, as a result, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 13.1623246493 175% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 23.0 7.85571142285 293% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 7.30460921844 219% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 34.0 24.0651302605 141% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1841.0 1615.20841683 114% => OK
No of words: 351.0 315.596192385 111% => OK
Chars per words: 5.24501424501 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32839392791 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77839864491 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 176.041082164 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.481481481481 0.561755894193 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 556.2 506.74238477 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.7814642171 49.4020404114 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.294117647 106.682146367 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6470588235 20.7667163134 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.94117647059 7.06120827912 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.9879759519 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.265979556832 0.244688304435 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0959687508872 0.084324248473 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0773252909839 0.0667982634062 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.171082752237 0.151304729494 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.101469979467 0.056905535591 178% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 13.0946893788 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.17 12.4159519038 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.96 8.58950901804 93% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 78.4519038076 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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