In the past, many male leaders have led our society to conflicts and violence, the world would be better governed and more peaceful if it was ruled by women. To what extent do you agree or disagree ?
Throughout history, there had been many wars in terms of society, economy,… Most of the conflicts were dominated by men, who are considered to be the stronger gender. However, some people believe that life could have been much better if the world was controlled by female. In my opinion, I absolutely disagree with this statement because of following reason.
Firstly, wars and violence are the ones that will never be evaded. They will happen sooner or later. The leaders should be chosen based on their characteristics, their talents in dominating rather than their genders. Many people think that men symbolize for strength and power, while women related to gentleness. However, this does not work at all in reality. Instead of creating these prejudices on genders, we should consider what kind of the wars in order to find the suitable leaders. For example, in terms of aggressive war, male leaders should be the priority, when talking about demonstration, we should prefer female. This is because women are good spokespeople, they know how to use their words to convince and encourage others although female always try to make the wars happen. By doing that, it may reduce the amount of death rate as well as damaging.
Another reason for this is that men are usually decisive than women. Women are easily prone to many things else such as love, children,.. to be good leaders. They are too sensitive and emotional to give serious decision. Their private things may be sometimes affected the huge career. For instance, Cleopatra VII was a precious and intelligent. However, she was also an ambitious woman who exploited some powerful men for her benefits. This means that she had let her personal things interfere the political activities.
All in all, I believe everyone was born with their own part in society. It is not a good idea to choose a leader based on their genders, we need to consider different side of them to make a good decision.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, however, if, may, so, well, while, for example, for instance, kind of, such as, talking about, as well as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 13.1623246493 167% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 24.0651302605 145% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1628.0 1615.20841683 101% => OK
No of words: 330.0 315.596192385 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.93333333333 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26214759535 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60958183535 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 176.041082164 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.60303030303 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 510.3 506.74238477 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 5.43587174349 294% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 16.0721442886 137% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.2975951904 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.2716745698 49.4020404114 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 74.0 106.682146367 69% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.0 20.7667163134 72% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.45454545455 7.06120827912 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.15086992328 0.244688304435 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0402001136466 0.084324248473 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0296449191146 0.0667982634062 44% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0874147349703 0.151304729494 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0362440173797 0.056905535591 64% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.3 13.0946893788 71% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 50.2224549098 129% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 11.3001002004 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.72 12.4159519038 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.35 8.58950901804 97% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 78.4519038076 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.1190380762 79% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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