People are surrounded by all kinds of advertising. Some people believe that advertising has a negative effect on people’s lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Nowadays, advertising is becoming one of the unavoidable parts of the modern life with the appearance of commercials being everywhere from physical advertisement such as flyer, brochure, magazine and newspaper to digital one known as pop-up ads on website, banners on the social networks. Although it is undeniable that those bring some benefits for consumers in providing about different products, I am an advocate for the statement that advertising makes an impact on people’s lives.
It is the fact that commercial businesses create the advertisement for the only purpose, boosting their sales. To reach this target, firstly, they may use commercials with pretty images and attractive descriptions for their products. The appearance of celebrities or successful people featuring with their products aims to persuade people that buying them will make them happier, although sometimes it is not necessary and useful. The companies may exaggerate their product’s features to make people think that they have to purchase for using immediately. For example, many of dairy companies indicate that
calcium in their milk helps children grow taller, therefore, there is a growing belief in many parents that their children only need to drink milk to be taller. Unfortunately, they do not know that some researches have shown that milk do not provide nutrients adequately for children aged more than 2 years old. Secondly, to approach the enormous number of people, companies advertise their products through many mediums such as radio, magazines, billboards, the Internet, newspapers, and most popularly, movies & television that degrades urban landscape, annoys the Internet users and disturbs TV audience. I doubt that you will be angry and tired if you see and watch the same ads of one product in all mediums for a long time.
Thirdly, to search for potential consumers, the information of people may be collected from social networks for the advertising purpose. Therefore, for instance, the data of Facebook users have been always collected and analyzed for advertising, in other words, the user privacy have been attempted and private information is in a high risk for leakage.
In general, advertising is likely a monster disturbing people’s mind and having many negative effects as well as some benefits so that it should be regulated and consumers should be more smarter.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
...many of dairy companies indicate that calcium in their milk helps children grow talle...
Line 11, column 190, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER
Message: The adverb 'always' is usually put between 'have' and 'been'.
Suggestion: have always been
...or instance, the data of Facebook users have been always collected and analyzed for advertising,...
Line 15, column 188, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE
Message: Use only 'smarter' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
...ld be regulated and consumers should be more smarter.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, if, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, third, thirdly, well, for example, for instance, in general, such as, as well as, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 24.0651302605 141% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2034.0 1615.20841683 126% => OK
No of words: 374.0 315.596192385 119% => OK
Chars per words: 5.4385026738 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3976220399 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94628172448 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 176.041082164 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.580213903743 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 623.7 506.74238477 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.2975951904 138% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 59.1267818451 49.4020404114 120% => OK
Chars per sentence: 156.461538462 106.682146367 147% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.7692307692 20.7667163134 139% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.8461538462 7.06120827912 168% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.187918375969 0.244688304435 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0724571169447 0.084324248473 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.060078413367 0.0667982634062 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.112995586279 0.151304729494 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0446030136431 0.056905535591 78% => OK
automated_readability_index: 18.6 13.0946893788 142% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 34.6 50.2224549098 69% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 11.3001002004 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.86 12.4159519038 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.88 8.58950901804 115% => OK
difficult_words: 115.0 78.4519038076 147% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.1190380762 130% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.