People live longer today and so people should stay in the workforce longer. To what extend do you agree or disagree?
People live longer today and so people should stay in the workforce longer. To what extend do you agree or disagree?
Early retirement has been claimed to make seniors experience financial hardship. Consequently,some people think that the retirement age should be expanded as the lifespan of people has increased significantly. Personally, I approve with this point of view in some extends.
According to the benefits related to late retirement, old people can gain more opportunities to ease their financial burden in daily life. In addition,having more time at work means achieving more salaries to support many age-related issue such as medical treatment, health insurance. Hence, earning their own livelihood would not only help them gain more confidence in believing that they can survive independently but also eradicate the burden they make for their children.
However, I still believe there are many reasons why many companies limit the age available for working . Firstly, the older the employees are, the more health risks they can suffer from. As people get old, spending time dealing with many heavy stuffs which require physical strength at work may negatively affect their health conditions. For instance, illness and arthritis may come as a price and bridge the lifespan of seniors.Moreover, gaining more ages also means less productivity in each individual . It is obvious that the efficiency of young employees is definitely higher than that of old workers. As a result, such old ages can negatively loosen the productivity of a whole company, leading to the disappointing profits.
Taking everything into consideration, although I cannot deny that encouraging seniors to work more is a positive way to support their physical live, I still believe old people need to consider more carefully before continuing their jobs since many adverse effects can emerge at that age.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, firstly, hence, however, if, may, moreover, so, still, for instance, in addition, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 41.998997996 74% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1596.0 1615.20841683 99% => OK
No of words: 297.0 315.596192385 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.37373737374 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.15134772569 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9755437646 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 176.041082164 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.622895622896 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 505.8 506.74238477 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.278101634 49.4020404114 120% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.4 106.682146367 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8 20.7667163134 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.93333333333 7.06120827912 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.01903807615 139% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.225895346645 0.244688304435 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0997581825517 0.084324248473 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.201509804497 0.0667982634062 302% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.242333709738 0.151304729494 160% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.380091187536 0.056905535591 668% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 13.0946893788 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 50.2224549098 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.87 12.4159519038 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.36 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 78.4519038076 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.