People in many countries have to spend more and more
time away from their home. Why is this? What are the effects on people
themselves and their families?
It is true that going out to study and work or take part in outdoor activities more and more popular in the modern society. This trend make the people spend almost time in outside rather than stay at home. There are various reasons behind this issue and this will bring specific impact on both people themselves and their families.
There are two important reasons can explain why people have less time to stay with their families. Firstly, with the competition in society lead to people go out and seek the opportunity for themselves. In other words, if students have dream to get scholarship, they must work harder by participate extra class after leaving school or take part in volunteer activities to create a perfect profiles or employee want to get promotion in company, they must push themselves work in high frequency, even work overtime. Almost time people have used for studying and working to help them have a better life in the future, therefore, they do not enough time at home anymore. Secondly, with the development of internet and the globalization, people tend to ignore the relationship with their families and spend time to make new friends. They preferred doing outdoor activities such as shopping, chatting with their friends rather than playing or eating at home with families.
Both factors have important consequences for individuals and their families. When people have concentrated on their work and working in high level, their mental and physical health will be affected. Working to much make people fell stress, hence they easy angry with the small thing or other people. As a result, they will gradually lose the relationship with friends or other member of family. In addition, sitting in the class or in the company for a long time without doing exercise bring higher rate of obesity which is dangerous disease. Besides that, if people spend time in outside more than stay at home it will affect the connection between members. For instance, parents focus on working to earn money, they cannot have enough time close with their children to educate them. As consequence, the development of children will have problem in the future.
In conclusion, some reasons are identified to explain why people tend to spend less time in their home and the consequences are far-reaching for individuals and their families.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 136, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'makes'.
Suggestion: makes
...pular in the modern society. This trend make the people spend almost time in outside...
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Line 2, column 237, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'dreamed', 'dreamt'.
Suggestion: dreamed; dreamt
...elves. In other words, if students have dream to get scholarship, they must work hard...
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Line 3, column 208, Rule ID: TO_TOO[2]
Message: Did you mean 'too'?
Suggestion: too
...ysical health will be affected. Working to much make people fell stress, hence the...
^^
Line 4, column 178, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ing for individuals and their families.
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, first, firstly, hence, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, such as, as a result, in other words, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 10.4138276553 192% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 61.0 41.998997996 145% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1957.0 1615.20841683 121% => OK
No of words: 389.0 315.596192385 123% => OK
Chars per words: 5.03084832905 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44106776838 4.20363070211 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57432391548 2.80592935109 92% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 176.041082164 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.491002570694 0.561755894193 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 596.7 506.74238477 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.0778145224 49.4020404114 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.722222222 106.682146367 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6111111111 20.7667163134 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.83333333333 7.06120827912 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.353917907021 0.244688304435 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.125748619137 0.084324248473 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0806843287598 0.0667982634062 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.262982329497 0.151304729494 174% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0363542925048 0.056905535591 64% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 13.0946893788 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 50.2224549098 117% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.89 12.4159519038 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.8 8.58950901804 91% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 78.4519038076 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.