The percentage of overweight children in western society has increased by almost 20% in the last ten years.
Discuss the causes and effects of this disturbing trend.
The percentile of obese children in western society has raised by nearly 20% in the past decades . This is due to enormous advertisements of unhealthy foods which cause health problems in daily life.
There are too much of adverts seen of junk food cuisines which are against / harmful for child’s health. The reason behind is that these marketing agencies are targetting to teenagers. These adolescent watches commercials of foodstuffs and demand their parents to go on weekends. While parents think that they are covering all part of the nutrients For instance, McDonald’s promote their brand to small ages of children, there is a section of play lands for the little children where they can relax and take part in recreational activities. Infact, most of their products as happy meal are focused for young adults. As a result of, this attracts to little ones which makes them gain in the body weight.
Whereas, there are numerous of diseases are observed in small children. This leads to, teen groups have become the patient of diabities, as well as heart stroke. Even most of the young children are slower in dealing ongoing tasks and they loose concentration. They also face struggle in studying at schools which stuck them to score lower marks in their academics records. However, when they grownup and starts another important phase of life which is marriage, it creates difficultly for satisfying the marital needs or at the time of giving birth to baby. Therefore, this accounts for adverse effect is noticed in child’s life.
In conclusion, promoting junk feasts is a reason of overweight in grown up children thus it leads to unhealthiness.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, so, therefore, thus, well, whereas, while, for instance, in conclusion, as a result, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 7.85571142285 13% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1389.0 1615.20841683 86% => OK
No of words: 274.0 315.596192385 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.06934306569 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0685311056 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67367492361 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.638686131387 0.561755894193 114% => OK
syllable_count: 404.1 506.74238477 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.5630861183 49.4020404114 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.6 106.682146367 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.2666666667 20.7667163134 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.6 7.06120827912 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.124115351027 0.244688304435 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0421507279773 0.084324248473 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0487501716134 0.0667982634062 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0914321606021 0.151304729494 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0565431533803 0.056905535591 99% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 13.0946893788 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 50.2224549098 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 12.4159519038 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.97 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 78.4519038076 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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