The percentage of overweight children in western society has increased by almost 20% in the last ten years. Discuss the causes and effects of this disturbing trend.
It is alarming that the proportion of children in Western countries with obesity has rocketed by nearly 20 percent in the last decade. Reasons for this unfavorable phenomenon vary and the consequences of it are plethora.
Regarding the causes of obesity among children, the frequent access to fast food and the lack of physical activities are to blame. While in Eastern nations the appearance of convenience food is rare, children in the West have been rather used to the omnipresence of famous fast food chains such as McDonald's or Burger King. Therefore, they shall have no difficulty buying and consuming these types of food on a regular basis which later results in their gaining weigh uncontrollably. Another reason for children being obese is the fact that the advances in technology have granted them with numerous options for entertainment within a tiny electronic device. As a result, outdoor activities are no longer a lucrative choice for children since they prefer to sit down and indulge in the endless source of fun on their phones. This sedentary lifestyle prohibits fat and energy from being converted and children will become overweight accordingly.
Considering the effects that a young obese population will have to face, not only will fat children struggle academically but their health is bound to suffer. First and foremost, obese children are vulnerable to the risks of multiple diseases such as diabetes and heart attack for which treatment costs are extremely exorbitant. Moreover, serious health problems resulted from obesity are too complicated to cure and they will inevitably remain a dilemma with children until adulthood. Secondly, being overweight has been proven to reduce human's productivity and brain power. This is detrimental to children in particular because their brains are developing at this age. As can be predicted, obese students are likely to have trouble understanding subjects at school and get poor grades.
In conclusion, the increasing number of fat children in Western areas stems from regular consumption of junk food and low level of exercises. Actions must be taken to prevent severe damage in terms of children's health and academic performances.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, but, first, if, moreover, regarding, second, secondly, so, therefore, while, in conclusion, in particular, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 13.1623246493 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 41.998997996 129% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1855.0 1615.20841683 115% => OK
No of words: 350.0 315.596192385 111% => OK
Chars per words: 5.3 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32530772707 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84805554864 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 176.041082164 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.597142857143 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 580.5 506.74238477 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.126641495 49.4020404114 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.9375 106.682146367 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.875 20.7667163134 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.75 7.06120827912 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.67935871743 23% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 3.9879759519 276% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.157145501246 0.244688304435 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0548133457157 0.084324248473 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0433662556621 0.0667982634062 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.107622471879 0.151304729494 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0274751032065 0.056905535591 48% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 50.2224549098 83% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.46 12.4159519038 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.78 8.58950901804 114% => OK
difficult_words: 113.0 78.4519038076 144% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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