At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people. Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?

Essay topics:

At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people.

Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?

In recent years, many countries around the world have experienced the considerable increase in youthful demographic, making up the large proportion of their national population, in comparison with elderly people. This essay will argue that the benefits of young population offset the drawbacks in term of economy and social development.

The young population will bring the several advantages to national economy. Firstly, young workforce is a major driver to contribute significantly to national industries, either manufacturing or service sectors. For example, qualified graduates with sufficient knowledge and hands-on experience, can get well-paid job at both multinational companies and local ones, resulting in paying more personal tax revenue to government. This can provide their governing authorities with more funds and resources to develop the infrastructure systems and other public services, such as hospitals and public schools. Second, by equipping with the new approaches during their studying at school, this young population is more likely to meet the excessive demands from globalization process. For instance, youthful entrepreneurs are appeared to communicate smoothly via various online platform to implement a myriad of transactions with their foreign partners, which can increase the foreign trade value between those countries.

One of the citing disadvantages of young population is that they lack of experience to handle social problems in harmony. This argument is caused by the fact that young generation usually fails to manage their negative emotions when resolving a large number of social conflicts simultaneously, even the minor contradiction, which could potentially warp their perception of practical solutions for their issues. However, thanks to the adoption skills to challenging environment, young people can improve the way to deal with these problems, which is conducive to civilized community, ensuring the social stability.

In conclusion, although there are still some downsides of an increase in young population in some countries, I strongly believe that the benefits are still outweigh due to their contribution to economy and social aspects.

Votes
Average: 8.9 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 244, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
... their negative emotions when resolving a large number of social conflicts simultaneously, even t...
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Line 7, column 157, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'outweighed'.
Suggestion: outweighed
...gly believe that the benefits are still outweigh due to their contribution to economy an...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, however, if, second, so, still, well, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 41.998997996 121% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 8.3376753507 252% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1881.0 1615.20841683 116% => OK
No of words: 321.0 315.596192385 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.85981308411 5.12529762239 114% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23278547379 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.09363519208 2.80592935109 110% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 176.041082164 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.626168224299 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 570.6 506.74238477 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 56.9917147975 49.4020404114 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 156.75 106.682146367 147% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.75 20.7667163134 129% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.0 7.06120827912 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.214415354518 0.244688304435 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0755712753557 0.084324248473 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0358811189072 0.0667982634062 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.12401063344 0.151304729494 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0082230307449 0.056905535591 14% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.5 13.0946893788 149% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 28.17 50.2224549098 56% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 11.3001002004 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 17.0 12.4159519038 137% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.63 8.58950901804 124% => OK
difficult_words: 116.0 78.4519038076 148% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 9.78957915832 133% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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