At the present time the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults compared with the number of older people Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages

Essay topics:

At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people. Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?

As 21 century continues to unfold, many individuals intend to have fewer children and nuclear family for wide array of compelling reasons, while others would argue that if this trend continues, we will face with shrinking workforce in the near future which can affect our society in many dimensions. In my view, although having large number of workforce in their prime is more beneficial, hoe to use of these young population efficiently is more crucial. I will outline advantages and drawback of young and older populations in different countries.

Recently, many statistic studies have shown that large older population and less young population are a moot subject, especially among developed countries which closely linked to the workforce vacancies ranging from specialists to manual job labors. On the other hand, senior citizens impose heavy burdens on their government and tax payers because they are more often in need of healthcare systems and other amenities. By the way of an example, many European countries such as Austria encourage parents through financial incentives to have more children and employ foreign skillful people in order to tackle this modern issue.

on the other side of the spectrum, mini sociologist opine that Younger population helps in wide variety of aspects such as economic growth, which consequently lead to decrease gaps in mind industrial countries and less developed countries. Therefore, employable citizens with wide range of abilities is of great importance in prosperous economy and welfare of all age groups since it increases the wealth by producing and exporting products and making great deal of money by large numbers of tax payers. For instance, china as a most significant young population, empowered this country both economically, scientifically and other various fields. As a result, china has occupied fifth grade of most industrialized nation all around the world.

To make a long story short,based on the aforementioned arguments,having more fresh and productive group of young people is far outweigh retired citizens. However, it depends on social and economic climate and job opportunities. Otherwise, the disadvantaged and unemployed individuals become a real pain in the neck for authorities.

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Average: 8.9 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, however, if, so, therefore, while, for instance, such as, as a result, by the way, in my view, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 10.4138276553 154% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 16.0 24.0651302605 66% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 41.998997996 121% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1916.0 1615.20841683 119% => OK
No of words: 350.0 315.596192385 111% => OK
Chars per words: 5.47428571429 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32530772707 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98376012605 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 220.0 176.041082164 125% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.628571428571 0.561755894193 112% => OK
syllable_count: 595.8 506.74238477 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 70.3717096197 49.4020404114 142% => OK
Chars per sentence: 147.384615385 106.682146367 138% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.9230769231 20.7667163134 130% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.69230769231 7.06120827912 137% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.196426099569 0.244688304435 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0628954849986 0.084324248473 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0494076536608 0.0667982634062 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.1087916082 0.151304729494 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0258172219837 0.056905535591 45% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.8 13.0946893788 136% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.63 50.2224549098 73% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 11.3001002004 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.74 12.4159519038 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.89 8.58950901804 115% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 78.4519038076 140% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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