Present a written argument or case to an educated reader with no specialist knowledge of the following topic.
"Fatherhood ought to be emphasised as much as motherhood. The idea that women are solely responsiblefor deciding whether or not to have babies leads on to the idea that they are also responsiblefor bringing the children up."
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
You should write at least 250 words.
You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidences.
To have a comprehensive growth both physically and mentally and a higher education, that child must have all care from his or her parents. However, there are some people think that only women are responsible for having babies decision and because of that women should be responsible for growing the children up. It is also the explanation why fatherhood is not much honored. To me, I strongly oppose this statement for some reasons below.
It is indeed a wrong conception which includes only women for pregnant issues. Firstly, thank to biological development, people today all know that having a baby must require combination of a sperm from a man and an oocyte from a woman. Secondly, women can solely prevent this by using drugs, devices or condoms but there is always a small chance of an unready conception. In fact, there is no method with one hundred percent safety. Lastly, budget for raising a child nowadays can cost a leg and an arm, so there should be an agreement existence between spouses when to have babies and how many kids they want, except for some unwillingly cases such as rapes or some ancient cultures. In those cases, women are passive persons in the relationships.
Let's look a little bit in father's sacrifice for their lovely children. They do not usually directly take care of their kids but they do a lot of other things to nurture them together with their moms. In the field of family finance, majority breadwinner is father. They work hard with no complaints to purchase a well-off family and to buy an advanced education for their children. Vice versa, for some minority, mothers are the ones who disappear almost all day in their children's eyes to have an enough paycheck for bringing up their sons. Besides, children can totally lean on their father because he is the most reliable and strongest person to protect them out of social dangers.
To conclude, fathers usually have a high but not easily recognized contribution in nurturing their children as mothers do. Therefore, it is an accusing mistake of not honoring fathers since they deserve to equally emphasized with mothers.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 1, Rule ID: LETS_LET[1]
Message: Did you mean 'Let's'?
Suggestion: Let's
...sive persons in the relationships. Lets look a little bit in fathers sacrifice ...
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Line 9, column 13, Rule ID: LITTLE_BIT[1]
Message: Reduce redundancy by using 'little' or 'bit'.
Suggestion: little; bit
... in the relationships. Lets look a little bit in fathers sacrifice for their lovely c...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, firstly, however, if, lastly, look, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, except for, in fact, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1770.0 1615.20841683 110% => OK
No of words: 360.0 315.596192385 114% => OK
Chars per words: 4.91666666667 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35587717469 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60533640396 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 176.041082164 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.597222222222 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 554.4 506.74238477 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.7940201675 49.4020404114 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.3333333333 106.682146367 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0 20.7667163134 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.22222222222 7.06120827912 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.152502919547 0.244688304435 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0481055985241 0.084324248473 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0355667259998 0.0667982634062 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0958969848734 0.151304729494 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0434571772674 0.056905535591 76% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 13.0946893788 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 50.2224549098 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 12.4159519038 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.88 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 78.4519038076 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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