Professional workers like doctors, nurses and teachers make a greater contribution to society and so should be paid more than sports and entertainment personalities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Today, sport and entertainment stars earn much more than ordinary people. Therefore, some people believe that those professional workers, such as doctors, nurses and teachers, who contribute more to the society ought to be paid more than personalities of sports and entertainment. However, I do not agree with this view.
Personalities working in sports and entertainment also contribute a lot to our society. We need entertainment and sport to relax ourselves after work. For example, we can play tennis, watch NBA or go to cinema with friends. Without these relaxations, our life would be very boring and tiring. Also, although the top players of these areas can make considerable amount of money, only a few people can become stars. Generally, most people in these areas are paid less than professional workers. Finally, the career life of sports and entertainment personalities are shorter than professional workers. For example, most professional soccer players retire when they reach 40 or younger. So, it is reasonable for them to make more money if they perform well.
There are also advantages to pay professional workers more than sports and entertainment personalities. First of all, it will attract more people to become professional workers, like doctors and teacher, and therefore this can improve national medication and education system. This means that we will have more skilled doctors to cure our diseases and more talented teachers to teach our next generation. In addition, it can make society more civilized because people will be inclined to go to university to get trained if they want to be professional workers which is paid more.
In summary, raising the income of professional workers do have a few advantages, but we cannot ignore the importance of sports and entertainment personalities.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, however, if, so, therefore, well, for example, in addition, in summary, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 10.4138276553 154% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 41.998997996 71% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1547.0 1615.20841683 96% => OK
No of words: 289.0 315.596192385 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.35294117647 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.12310562562 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.06689973293 2.80592935109 109% => OK
Unique words: 159.0 176.041082164 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.550173010381 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 477.9 506.74238477 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 45.7094782445 49.4020404114 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.0 106.682146367 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0 20.7667163134 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.05882352941 7.06120827912 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 8.67935871743 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.375316326233 0.244688304435 153% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.119771974575 0.084324248473 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0839305831352 0.0667982634062 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.239028417525 0.151304729494 158% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0687733048056 0.056905535591 121% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 13.0946893788 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 45.76 50.2224549098 91% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.45 12.4159519038 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.14 8.58950901804 95% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 78.4519038076 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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