PROPOSITION: SOME PEOPLE BELIEVE THAT WHAT CHILDREN WATCH AFFECTS THEIR BEHAVIOR WHILE OTHERS THINK THAT THE LONG HOURS IN FRONT OF TELEVISION IS THE REASON FOR THEIR BEHAVIOR.
PROMPT: DISCUSS BOTH VIEWS AND GIVE YOUR OPINION
Televisions are among the appliances for entertainment that are compact and affordable, thus televisions in different shapes and sizes are being in possession of every household. It is being argued by some that watching television affects the behavior of youngsters, others, however, believe that the time spent in viewing such, is the one causing the behavioral changes. The writer would elaborate on both arguments and aims to cite an opinion in this essay.
On one hand, television shows entertain every age group, particularly youngsters. However, a variety of shows from children to adult restricted shows could be easily accessed by different television channels. News broadcasts that report about violence and crime such as murder and rape could greatly affect a child’s innocence, thereby dangerously risking the child to commit the same crime at an early age. Moreover, the longer the time a child spends in watching this type of television shows, could cause a greater impact on their behavior, as longer exposure leads to witnessing an enormous number of age-restricted shows. Having said these, children should be strictly guided by the parents in the prevention of undesirable conduct changes.
On the other hand, the type of shows the youngsters are watching and the time a child spends on viewing could not be considered the major factors that affect a child’s behavior, instead, the behavior is exponentially affected by the environment the children are being exposed to. For example, in a home where peace could not be found and whose parents are consistently fighting and shouting in front of the offspring, give a child the thinking that expressions of anger could be done not privately and conflicts could not be addressed by peaceful conversations. In addition, school bullying greatly affects a child’s interpersonal and social conduct. For instance, bullied children grew up either socially detached and/or difficult to handle. Furthermore, a youngster raised in an environment without a parent or an adult to guide them usually becomes confused as they are not trained to identify and separate noble acts from prohibited ones. Admittedly, without enlightenment from a guardian, what a child experiences and the kind of environment a kid is being exposed to are the paramount reason that affects a child’s behavior.
To recapitulate, with strict parental guidance, the variation of television shows and the length of time spent for viewing do not considerably affect a child’s behaving way. On the contrary, in my perspective, what crucially influence the children’s conduct are the environment being exposed to and the absence of guidance from a well-grown individual who could properly explain and differentiate right from wrong. Thus, environment modifications like privately dealing with parental conflicts, prevention of bullying among age groups and availability of adults to guide the children are beneficial to address these misconducts.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...eve that the time spent in viewing such, is the one causing the behavioral change...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, however, if, moreover, so, thus, well, for example, for instance, in addition, kind of, such as, on the contrary, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 13.1623246493 190% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 10.4138276553 182% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 16.0 24.0651302605 66% => OK
Preposition: 64.0 41.998997996 152% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 8.3376753507 216% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2547.0 1615.20841683 158% => OK
No of words: 463.0 315.596192385 147% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.50107991361 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.63868890866 4.20363070211 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.12149807983 2.80592935109 111% => OK
Unique words: 240.0 176.041082164 136% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.518358531317 0.561755894193 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 779.4 506.74238477 154% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 5.43587174349 18% => OK
Article: 7.0 2.52805611222 277% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 63.851633823 49.4020404114 129% => OK
Chars per sentence: 149.823529412 106.682146367 140% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.2352941176 20.7667163134 131% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.47058823529 7.06120827912 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.9879759519 251% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.207758943331 0.244688304435 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0686014064088 0.084324248473 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0605671459823 0.0667982634062 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.136255454233 0.151304729494 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.056501337752 0.056905535591 99% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.1 13.0946893788 138% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.61 50.2224549098 71% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 11.3001002004 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.92 12.4159519038 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.55 8.58950901804 111% => OK
difficult_words: 134.0 78.4519038076 171% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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