In some developing countries, children in rural communities do not have access to education. Some people believe that it could be solved by schools and teachers. Others claim that it could be better solved by internet and computers.
Discuss both these views and give your opinion.
Many underdeveloped countries that are yet to emerge have far-flung areas where education is not readily accessible. With regards to this, it is being argued by many that this problem could be addressed through building of schools and increasing the number of school personnel, particularly teachers. Others, think, however, that the education could be better improved through the utilization of computers and availability of internet connection. The writer would explain these two arguments in this essay and cite an opinion.
Admittedly, far-flung areas are profoundly difficult to reach, some have to walk or hike kilometers away while others have to cross dangerous bridges or bodies of water to get to these rural areas. Having that said, youngsters living in these areas suffer, as education is somehow unachievable, and not readily accessible to them. It is by no means certain that is a noble act when passionate teachers willingly advocate educating these children living in the far-flung areas. However, this noble act could not continue if the number of educators is not enough and a place for conducive learning is not sufficient to accommodate the number of learners. Having said these, the difficulties in educating these children could be addressed by employing more teachers and building more venues for learning. Moreover, sleeping quarters for educators should be considered for them to have a resting place to stay while in these areas, this way, teachers do not have to travel back and forth on a daily basis.
On the other hand, the breakthrough in technology is undeniably making the education problems easier to solve. The use of computers and readily accessible internet connection makes it more possible to educate children living in rural areas without having to bring a number of printed materials to read. As mentioned earlier, dangerous roads have to surpass to reach these areas, which make it not possible to bring the students enough number of printed materials such as textbooks and encyclopedias, which are essential education materials. Having said these, computers and stable internet connection address the insufficiency of these materials, as the internet is the major provider of online resources, which are readily accessible in just a snap. Moreover, books in pdf formats could also be saved on these computers. Furthermore, the availability of computers makes it possible to come up with creative powerpoint presentations, making the sharing of knowledge more interesting and enjoyable, thus more efficient.
Having considered both sides, in my opinion, education difficulties in far-flung areas could be better addressed by increasing both the number of teachers and the number of computers. Moreover, enlargement of school buildings to accommodate the increasing number of students, personnel and computers should also be considered. In addition, the provision of stable internet connection improves the educator’s teaching strategies, thus improving the learning of the students.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, furthermore, however, if, moreover, so, thus, while, in addition, such as, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 13.1623246493 160% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 10.4138276553 154% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 66.0 41.998997996 157% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2576.0 1615.20841683 159% => OK
No of words: 467.0 315.596192385 148% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.51605995717 5.12529762239 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64867537961 4.20363070211 111% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99985556008 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 176.041082164 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.464668094218 0.561755894193 83% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 798.3 506.74238477 158% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.2776259583 49.4020404114 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 135.578947368 106.682146367 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.5789473684 20.7667163134 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.94736842105 7.06120827912 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.25120172585 0.244688304435 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0867015229132 0.084324248473 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0605686682315 0.0667982634062 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.165139921485 0.151304729494 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.019853799548 0.056905535591 35% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.9 13.0946893788 129% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 50.2224549098 77% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.03 12.4159519038 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.78 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 117.0 78.4519038076 149% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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