Q11: Some people believe that young people who commit serious crimes should be punished in the same way as adults. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Recently, the issue of young people's punishment has become the subject of heated debate. Some people assert that youth criminals should be treated differently from adult offenders, while others argue otherwise. And I wholeheartedly agree with the former stand. In the following essay, both views will be discussed before a conclusion is reached with my opinion.
On the one hand, those who claim that juvenile delinquents should be penalised in the same way as adults do so for several reasons. Proponents of this argument insist that teenagers need to learn that not only does their illegal behaviour have detrimental consequences, but it will not be tolerated. In addition, imposing harsh penalties on youth criminals could act as a deterrent. To provide a hypothetical example, if youngsters witnessed teenage perpetrators of crimes being incarcerated in jail, they would be less likely to break the law.
My opinion, however, is that forcing minors to take the same responsibility for their unlawful activities as adults has to be discouraged. Perhaps the most compelling reason is that it is unfair to inflict severe penalties on young criminals considering that the majority of the youth generally have difficulty distinguishing right from wrong. Another convincing reason is that adolescents should have a chance to change and to become law-abiding citizens. If they are punished severely, this opportunity might be lost and, as a result, they might enter into a life of crime, which exerts a negative influence on our society. Therefore, other methods of punishment, such as vocational training and community service, should be implemented in order to help them reintegrate back into society. In light of the above, I find these more persuasive.
In conclusion, it is undeniable that there are a variety of opinions about this topic. However, after considering this matter in a careful manner, I fully support the view that punishing young offenders as harshly as adults should be forbidden for the reasons discussed above.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 128, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a careful manner" with adverb for "careful"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
... However, after considering this matter in a careful manner, I fully support the view that punishin...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, so, therefore, while, as to, in addition, in conclusion, such as, as a result, in the same way
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1727.0 1615.20841683 107% => OK
No of words: 323.0 315.596192385 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.34674922601 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23936324884 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96472566859 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 176.041082164 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.634674922601 0.561755894193 113% => OK
syllable_count: 541.8 506.74238477 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.8133100201 49.4020404114 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.9375 106.682146367 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1875 20.7667163134 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 7.06120827912 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.9879759519 251% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.298610265158 0.244688304435 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.08098128768 0.084324248473 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0688545048184 0.0667982634062 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.180278496754 0.151304729494 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0651797284868 0.056905535591 115% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 13.0946893788 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 50.2224549098 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.75 12.4159519038 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.61 8.58950901804 112% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 78.4519038076 130% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 128, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a careful manner" with adverb for "careful"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
... However, after considering this matter in a careful manner, I fully support the view that punishin...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, so, therefore, while, as to, in addition, in conclusion, such as, as a result, in the same way
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1727.0 1615.20841683 107% => OK
No of words: 323.0 315.596192385 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.34674922601 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23936324884 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96472566859 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 176.041082164 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.634674922601 0.561755894193 113% => OK
syllable_count: 541.8 506.74238477 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.8133100201 49.4020404114 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.9375 106.682146367 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1875 20.7667163134 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 7.06120827912 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.9879759519 251% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.298610265158 0.244688304435 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.08098128768 0.084324248473 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0688545048184 0.0667982634062 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.180278496754 0.151304729494 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0651797284868 0.056905535591 115% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 13.0946893788 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 50.2224549098 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.75 12.4159519038 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.61 8.58950901804 112% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 78.4519038076 130% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.