Q20. Over the last few decades there has been an increase in international tourism Some people think that tourism is beneficial for local communities and should be encouraged. To what extent do you agree or disagree.
Recently, the question of whether the growth of global tourism is advantageous has become the subject of heated debate. Some people assert that global tourism should not be discouraged as it exerts a positive influence on local communities, while others argue otherwise. Personally, I believe that both arguments should be given equal weight. In the following essay, the evidence supporting this contention will be discussed alongside relevant examples.
On the one hand, it seems difficult to refute the idea that there are a number of advantages that can be derived from a boom in global tourism. Perhaps the principal benefit is that tourism attracts investment from international corporations and governments across the globe, helping local communities to invigorate economic progress. In addition, global tourism creates numerous well-paying and prestigious employment opportunities in the building of facilities and the updating of infrastructure, such as railways and roads, which makes it possible for local residents to lend an occupation with greater ease. To provide a hypothetical example, if it were not for global tourism, there would be much higher unemployment rates in a multitude of well-known cities amongst overseas visitors, such as Paris and Venice, considering that economies in these cities revolve around tourist spending.
On the other hand, it seems short-sighted to contend that a rise in global tourism merely brings with it positives. The most oft-cited argument against such a view is that a myriad of foreign travellers pose a threat to the local environment. As an illustration, a natural heritage site designated by UNESCO in South Korea had numerous endangered species of birds playing a vital role in keeping biodiversity in the year 2010. However, according to an article released by the Seoul Times, approximately 70% of these species became extinct due to an astronomical quantity of waste generated by overseas tourists, which took a heavy toll on the natural habitat. Furthermore, some foreign visitors often commit vandalism, placing a heavy burden on local governments since they have to spend a vast sum of money restoring damaged amenities. In light of the above, I also find these persuasive.
In conclusion, it is undeniable that there are a variety of opinions about this topic. However, after considering this matter in a careful manner, it can be concluded that each side of the debate has its strengths, as discussed above.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 11, Rule ID: WHETHER[3]
Message: Wordiness: Shorten this phrase to the shortest possible suggestion.
Suggestion: whether; the question whether
Recently, the question of whether the growth of global tourism is advanta...
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Line 8, column 127, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a careful manner" with adverb for "careful"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
... However, after considering this matter in a careful manner, it can be concluded that each side of ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, furthermore, however, if, so, well, while, as to, in addition, in conclusion, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 41.998997996 143% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2097.0 1615.20841683 130% => OK
No of words: 389.0 315.596192385 123% => OK
Chars per words: 5.39074550129 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44106776838 4.20363070211 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.04256170894 2.80592935109 108% => OK
Unique words: 236.0 176.041082164 134% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.606683804627 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 666.0 506.74238477 131% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.76152304609 210% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.7253814203 49.4020404114 131% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.0625 106.682146367 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.3125 20.7667163134 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.875 7.06120827912 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.202065487842 0.244688304435 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0575471202261 0.084324248473 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0476258938332 0.0667982634062 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.108231260944 0.151304729494 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0644318606428 0.056905535591 113% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.1 13.0946893788 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 50.2224549098 77% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.28 12.4159519038 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.23 8.58950901804 119% => OK
difficult_words: 133.0 78.4519038076 170% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 11, Rule ID: WHETHER[3]
Message: Wordiness: Shorten this phrase to the shortest possible suggestion.
Suggestion: whether; the question whether
Recently, the question of whether the growth of global tourism is advanta...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 8, column 127, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a careful manner" with adverb for "careful"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
... However, after considering this matter in a careful manner, it can be concluded that each side of ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, furthermore, however, if, so, well, while, as to, in addition, in conclusion, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 41.998997996 143% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2097.0 1615.20841683 130% => OK
No of words: 389.0 315.596192385 123% => OK
Chars per words: 5.39074550129 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44106776838 4.20363070211 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.04256170894 2.80592935109 108% => OK
Unique words: 236.0 176.041082164 134% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.606683804627 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 666.0 506.74238477 131% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.76152304609 210% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.7253814203 49.4020404114 131% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.0625 106.682146367 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.3125 20.7667163134 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.875 7.06120827912 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.202065487842 0.244688304435 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0575471202261 0.084324248473 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0476258938332 0.0667982634062 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.108231260944 0.151304729494 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0644318606428 0.056905535591 113% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.1 13.0946893788 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 50.2224549098 77% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.28 12.4159519038 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.23 8.58950901804 119% => OK
difficult_words: 133.0 78.4519038076 170% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.