Q30 : Some people believe that studying at university or college is the best route to a successful career, while others believe that it is better to get a job straight after school. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Recently, the issue of university education has become the subject of heated debate. Some people assert that the best path to a successful career is to study at university, while others argue otherwise. And I wholeheartedly agree with the former stand. In the following essay, both views will be discussed before a conclusion is reached with my opinion.
On the one hand, it seems difficult to refute the idea that there are some advantages that can be derived from finding employment instantly after graduating from high school to build a better career. Proponents of this argument insist that teenagers can have a chance to gain real experience and learn practical skills related to their chosen professions at an early age, which allows teenagers to surpass counterparts entering university in the fiercely competitive society. Another argument is that practical skills are not instilled at university since university education tends to focus on theory. For these reasons, some people hold the view that young people should be employed right away after secondary education.
My opinion, however, is that forcing youngsters to enter tertiary education plays a key role in their future careers. Perhaps the most compelling reason is that having a tight grasp of a myriad of theoretical knowledge resulting from higher education can lead people to become an expert in the field related to their major. To exemplify, one recent article released by Seoul Times illustrates that approximately 70% of employees holding high positions in Samsung earned a bachelor’s degree, which means that those who studied further are more likely to become promoted. Another convincing reason is that people who graduated from university can have a wide range of options in a job market considering that academic qualifications are necessary in some professions, such as doctors and teachers. In light of the above, I find these more persuasive.
In conclusion, it is undeniable that there are a variety of opinions about this topic. However, after considering this matter in a careful manner, I fully support the view that receiving tertiary education should be encouraged for the reasons discussed above.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Consider replacing "in a careful manner" with adverb for "careful"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, second, so, still, while, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 10.4138276553 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 18.0 7.30460921844 246% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 54.0 41.998997996 129% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1854.0 1615.20841683 115% => OK
No of words: 348.0 315.596192385 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.3275862069 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31911543099 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85233538507 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 176.041082164 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.594827586207 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 594.0 506.74238477 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 68.6273673949 49.4020404114 139% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.6 106.682146367 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.2 20.7667163134 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.06666666667 7.06120827912 58% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.223606666928 0.244688304435 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0694411565408 0.084324248473 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.072531951275 0.0667982634062 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.136997885653 0.151304729494 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0758341034734 0.056905535591 133% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 13.0946893788 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 50.2224549098 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.93 12.4159519038 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.59 8.58950901804 112% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 78.4519038076 135% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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