Q5 : It is not necessary for people to travel to other places to learn about the culture. We can learn as much as from books, films, and the Internet. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Recently, the question of how to understand the culture of other places has become the subject of heated debate. Some people assert that people do not need to travel abroad in order to learn about other cultures, while others argue otherwise. Personally, I believe that both arguments should be given equal weight. In the following essay, the evidence supporting this contention will be discussed alongside relevant examples.
On the one hand, it seems difficult to refute the idea that travelling overseas makes it possible for people to have a deeper understanding of different cultures. Perhaps the most compelling reason is that paying a visit to foreign countries enables travellers not only to communicate with locals in person but also to mingle with them, leading tourists to acquire vivid knowledge about local cultures. In addition, some materials, such as books and movies, often present biased information given that these include the intentions of writers or producers, preventing readers from understanding cultures precisely. For these reasons, there does seem to be a solid basis for the claim that firsthand experience is much more beneficial for learning about foreign cultures than secondhand experience.
On the other hand, it seems short-sighted to contend that taking trips to foreign nations is the sole way of having a tight grasp of different cultures. The most oft-cited argument against such a view is that the development of technology has revolutionised the way people have access to a huge amount of information about the places that they are incapable of visiting with greater ease regardless of time and place. To exemplify, a cultural heritage site designated by UNESCO in South Korea that has a myriad of endangered species of birds prevented tourists from entering the site since an astronomical amount of garbage generated by visitors posed a threat to the natural habitat. However, people are able to find cultural knowledge about the habitat owing to various methods, such as the Internet. In light of the above, I also find these persuasive.
In conclusion, it is undeniable that there are a variety of opinions about this topic. However, after considering this matter in a careful manner, it can be concluded that each side of the debate has its strengths, as discussed above.
Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 8, column 127, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a careful manner" with adverb for "careful"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
... However, after considering this matter in a careful manner, it can be concluded that each side of ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, second, so, while, in addition, in conclusion, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 64.0 41.998997996 152% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1955.0 1615.20841683 121% => OK
No of words: 373.0 315.596192385 118% => OK
Chars per words: 5.24128686327 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39467950092 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82297864541 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 220.0 176.041082164 125% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.58981233244 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 622.8 506.74238477 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 65.0686475108 49.4020404114 132% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.333333333 106.682146367 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.8666666667 20.7667163134 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.93333333333 7.06120827912 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.245974270775 0.244688304435 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.069698773504 0.084324248473 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0691331197291 0.0667982634062 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.130493885105 0.151304729494 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0592566089716 0.056905535591 104% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.7 13.0946893788 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 50.2224549098 77% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.41 12.4159519038 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.61 8.58950901804 112% => OK
difficult_words: 113.0 78.4519038076 144% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 8, column 127, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a careful manner" with adverb for "careful"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
... However, after considering this matter in a careful manner, it can be concluded that each side of ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, second, so, while, in addition, in conclusion, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 64.0 41.998997996 152% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1955.0 1615.20841683 121% => OK
No of words: 373.0 315.596192385 118% => OK
Chars per words: 5.24128686327 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39467950092 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82297864541 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 220.0 176.041082164 125% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.58981233244 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 622.8 506.74238477 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 65.0686475108 49.4020404114 132% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.333333333 106.682146367 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.8666666667 20.7667163134 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.93333333333 7.06120827912 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.245974270775 0.244688304435 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.069698773504 0.084324248473 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0691331197291 0.0667982634062 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.130493885105 0.151304729494 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0592566089716 0.056905535591 104% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.7 13.0946893788 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 50.2224549098 77% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.41 12.4159519038 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.61 8.58950901804 112% => OK
difficult_words: 113.0 78.4519038076 144% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.