in a recent survey conducted in this country it was found that up to 20% of twelve years old in some schools were showing early signs of nicotine addictions. in the eighteen to twenty year age bracket the percentage was as high as 70%. A large contributing factors to this high levels of addiction is attribute to the uncensored TV advertising of cigarettes.
are they must be banned
TV commercial are a powerful instrument to deceive people. They can make unwilling needs for human beings. TV advertisements are considered as a most important and noticeable TV programs. Sometimes they can be problematic. Uncensored TV advertising of cigarettes is considered as a drive actually for youths. There are a plenty of reason for banning them, which I will mention them in my essay.
Firstly, unhealthy substance such as cigarettes are representing a huge threat for human being; therefore, the mainly attempt should be considered for avoiding them. If TV commercials show cigarettes, and try to persuade people to utilize them the youngest people in any society will be the victims. They aren’t adolescent and mature enough to realize about wrong items therefore, exiting TV commercials can have a significant impact on their decision making.
Secondly, nowadays being addicted to the nicotine and other narcotics is very prevailing. This problem has been seeing not only among college students, but also among school students. According to the provided statistics more than 70 percent of youths are addicted by cigarettes; therefore, multimedia, specially TV should be careful about its programs, because their effects on people’s mind are obvious. It is influential because of relying on TV stars’ effects on people.
In overall, in any society youths are the vulnerable group. They can easily impacted by anything and TV commercials are not exception. They are both powerful and efficient, therefore advertising harmful items can worsen the situation. Prohibiting such a dangerous advertisement seems to be rational.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: 'impact'
Suggestion: impact
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 13.1623246493 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 7.30460921844 14% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 24.0651302605 66% => OK
Preposition: 25.0 41.998997996 60% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1400.0 1615.20841683 87% => OK
No of words: 253.0 315.596192385 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.53359683794 5.12529762239 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.98822939669 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.11140259912 2.80592935109 111% => OK
Unique words: 157.0 176.041082164 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.620553359684 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 432.9 506.74238477 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.2975951904 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 48.0505068763 49.4020404114 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.3529411765 106.682146367 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.8823529412 20.7667163134 72% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.76470588235 7.06120827912 67% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0208389627943 0.244688304435 9% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.00657015180241 0.084324248473 8% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0129510779317 0.0667982634062 19% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.013093067138 0.151304729494 9% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0172682625782 0.056905535591 30% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 13.0946893788 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 48.81 50.2224549098 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.2 12.4159519038 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.26 8.58950901804 108% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 78.4519038076 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.1190380762 75% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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More content wanted.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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