Schools concentrate far too much on traditional subjects which do not adequately prepare students for the realistic demands of the modern working world. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Whether compulsory subjects at schools are crucial to students'future or not is a hot debate. Some people believe that knowledge can not provide pupils with essential skills for their employment opportunities. Personally, I partially agree with this statement.
On the one hand, the importance of the knowledge absorbed at schools is undeniable. Thanks to traditional subjects, students can acquire the knowledge of almost all fields such as biology, history, science, which lays a foundation for their majors in the future. Furthermore, some subjects like maths and literature possibly help to improve their critical thinking. In terms of maths, pupils seem to concentrate hard to find different solutions, whereas they can practice to debate and think about various aspects of a problem while learning literature.
On the other hand, focusing the attention on studying those subjects is detrimental to the students. Due to much pressure on scores and ranks at schools from their parents and teachers, they are likely to spend most of the time attending extra classes and learning theories. As a result, they do not have enough time to participate in extracurricular activities like playing sports or doing voluntary works, which provides them with practical skills. In other words, the theories at schools might not adequately prepare them for the demands of the working world.
To conclude, the knowledge of those traditional subjects is important for pupils. My view is that besides concentration on the study at schools, students should acquire more intellectual skills by other activities for the best preparation.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 105, Rule ID: TO_TOO[2]
Message: Did you mean 'too'?
Suggestion: too
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, furthermore, if, so, whereas, while, such as, as a result, in other words, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 24.0651302605 66% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1373.0 1615.20841683 85% => OK
No of words: 252.0 315.596192385 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.44841269841 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.98428260373 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9742612795 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 155.0 176.041082164 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.615079365079 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 408.6 506.74238477 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.2444544449 49.4020404114 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.615384615 106.682146367 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.3846153846 20.7667163134 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.76923076923 7.06120827912 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.227417668078 0.244688304435 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0735349426137 0.084324248473 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0581926085936 0.0667982634062 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.125489068175 0.151304729494 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0497030620791 0.056905535591 87% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 13.0946893788 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.33 12.4159519038 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.9 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 78.4519038076 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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More content wanted.
Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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