Opinions are divided on what kind of occupation should young adults have. While I agree with the argument that they might be inappropriate to be in crucial positions for some reasons, I would argue that having them in these places can have more beneficial influence.
On the one hand, there has been a concern that young officials might not have enough experience to be competent in such positions. Since they just enter the workplace, they are unable to put those theories that they learned at school into practice immediately, which means that they probably will fail to deal with some controversial social issues. By contrast, for those elderly people who have already experienced a great deal of changes in society and proposed quite a few reforms, they are more likely to handle these issues skillfully and efficiently.
On the other hand, people in support of them to apply for these positions believe that they always catch up with times, meaning that they can provide new insights into certain problem. For example, there is an increasing number of cyber crimes in this day and age, and there are quite a few residents have been tricked into giving their money to those devious criminals online. In this case, officials at younger age can work out effective solutions to this problem easily. As they make up the largest proportion of netizen and keep pace with the advancement of electronic technology, they have the access to understanding and identifying those offenders’ schemes so as to propose suitable measures to tackle this.
In conclusion, although young officials may not be rather experienced, from my point of view, they should be encouraged to take up significant positions because their up-to-date abilities can certainly help to make the society better in this Information age.
- The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries 67
- The graph below shows the amounts of waste produced by three companies over a period of 15 years 67
- The graph below shows the amounts of waste produced by three companies over a period of 15 years
- Some argue younger people are not suitable for important positions in the government while others think this is a good idea Discuss both views and give your opinion 67
- The graph below shows the amounts of waste produced by three companies over a period of 15 years 67
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 655, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...and identifying those offenders schemes so as to propose suitable measures to tackle thi...
^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, may, so, while, as to, for example, in conclusion, kind of, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 24.0651302605 154% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 48.0 41.998997996 114% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1485.0 1615.20841683 92% => OK
No of words: 297.0 315.596192385 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.0 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.15134772569 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59986735709 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.579124579125 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 473.4 506.74238477 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 5.43587174349 0% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 1.0 16.0721442886 6% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 297.0 20.2975951904 1463% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 0.0 49.4020404114 0% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 1485.0 106.682146367 1392% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 297.0 20.7667163134 1430% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 81.0 7.06120827912 1147% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 8.67935871743 12% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.145632165342 0.244688304435 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.145632165342 0.084324248473 173% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0667982634062 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0892665015207 0.151304729494 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0366220663544 0.056905535591 64% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 150.6 13.0946893788 1150% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -229.98 50.2224549098 -458% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 0.0 7.44779559118 0% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 119.1 11.3001002004 1054% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 13.2 12.4159519038 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 22.46 8.58950901804 261% => Dale chall readability score is high.
difficult_words: 77.0 78.4519038076 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 56.0 9.78957915832 572% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 120.8 10.1190380762 1194% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 151.0 10.7795591182 1401% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
---------------------
Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.