Some believe that people should not continue to work once they reach the age of retirement. Do you agree or disagree? Give examples and provide explanation.

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Some believe that people should not continue to work once they reach the age of retirement. Do you agree or disagree? Give examples and provide explanation.

In this era of fast paced life, every single item is expensive beginning from the food to shelter. Certainly without earning it is difficult to survive. Thus, most of the time people tend to work life long, until the retirement, while some people argue that they should quit the job at early age. Therefore, I will discuss both the views.
To begin with, each individual think of their future by securing their savings which was earned by them till the retirement. It is evident that without money we are unable to full fill our desires. Although our children may take care of us by providing all that we need without any hesitation. Nevertheless, standing independently till the late age by working will always give us the freedom of life and good health. For example, if I, am a banker and I, will work constantly till the retirement, then I, will remain happy as well as updated without thinking of my expenses, as I, have to manage by my own.
On flip side, it’s a fast growing modern world and people often expect profit. As we grow elder, some time we may fail to increase our productivity because of demanding job. Due to this, many people lose their jobs. As we all know that today the requirement of young work force is top priority as they are updated with ongoing technology. For instance, today in hospitality industry, it’s easy to get job for the young person in comparison to the aged ones.
In conclusion, undoubtedly elderly person face many aches to find a new employment. so I, believe that, No matter how wealthy a person is if he continues to work unless he gets retirement, then that is biggest asset of his her life as he or she can leave the fullest.

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Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: “Although” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...we are unable to full fill our desires. Although our children may take care of us by pro...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: So
...ce many aches to find a new employment. so I, believe that, No matter how wealthy ...
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Line 4, column 199, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'is the biggest'.
Suggestion: is the biggest
...rk unless he gets retirement, then that is biggest asset of his her life as he or she can ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, may, nevertheless, so, then, therefore, thus, well, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, as well as, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 24.0651302605 166% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1387.0 1615.20841683 86% => OK
No of words: 301.0 315.596192385 95% => OK
Chars per words: 4.60797342193 5.12529762239 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.16525528304 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56148118456 2.80592935109 91% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 176.041082164 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.627906976744 0.561755894193 112% => OK
syllable_count: 442.8 506.74238477 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 2.10420841683 333% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.6158347918 49.4020404114 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.6875 106.682146367 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8125 20.7667163134 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.125 7.06120827912 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.178140829221 0.244688304435 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0463686851008 0.084324248473 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0586438173951 0.0667982634062 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.100408280024 0.151304729494 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0326145180004 0.056905535591 57% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.7 13.0946893788 74% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 50.2224549098 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.46 12.4159519038 76% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.68 8.58950901804 89% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 78.4519038076 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 9.78957915832 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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