Some companies sponsor sport and sports stars as a way to advertise themselves. Some people think it is good, while others think there are disadvantages. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
It is true that sport is such a lucrative industry that it has attracted huge investment from corporations who want to promote their image. While there are those who maintain that this is beneficial, I believe that there are far more drawbacks.
It is widely perceived that corporate sponsorship in sporting events and professional sportsmen reaps the benefit. With private patronage, athletes can have better access to more advanced training conditions and improved nutrients. This would not only ensure their development to the fullest but also enhance their chance of success. Once the sports stars or teams win in a championship, the funders will gain reputation. Even if the sponsored sporting players or teams do not win, the companies’ brand name will still be advertised as it is printed on either athletes’ outfits or on logos displayed around the playground. It should also be noted that with short career span, coupled with intensive training and great dedication, professional sportsmen deserve to be funded.
The downsides of making investment in sports and athletes, however, are indisputable. One danger this represents would be the strain facing players, forcing them to win at any costs. This means that they can cheat during the match, or even cause injuries to members of the rival team to defeat them. For this reason, sport would become more commercialized, resulting in the loss of its true value. What is more, when too much emphasis is placed into sports, other key sectors such as education and medicine might be marginalized. In fact, these fields are significant for the growth of a nation, but they might not bring instant economic returns for the financiers. In the long run, the funding imbalance between different areas of interest could pose a threat to overall development of a country.
In sum, for the reasons mentioned above, I would contend that the financial support of corporations has both merits and demerits. However, the positives are overshadowed by the negatives.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, so, still, while, in fact, such as, it is true, what is more
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1692.0 1615.20841683 105% => OK
No of words: 326.0 315.596192385 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.19018404908 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24917287072 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83874119618 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 176.041082164 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.628834355828 0.561755894193 112% => OK
syllable_count: 507.6 506.74238477 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 31.500755195 49.4020404114 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.5294117647 106.682146367 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1764705882 20.7667163134 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.94117647059 7.06120827912 70% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.102072443824 0.244688304435 42% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0315350033633 0.084324248473 37% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0367127064278 0.0667982634062 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0548973560115 0.151304729494 36% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0255501146397 0.056905535591 45% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 13.0946893788 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.82 12.4159519038 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.08 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 78.4519038076 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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