Some companies sponsor sport and sport stars as a way to advertise themselves Some people think it is good while others think there are disadvantages Discuss both views and give your opinion

Many businesses are now sponsoring sports teams and events as a means of advertising. There is an argument about whether it has positive or negative effects. However, I believe it is up to sports organisations to ensure companies, that donate to them, provide good products for our health and society.

On the one hand, many sports teams and players could not practice without sponsorship. Every team require a variety of facilities for players' workout, which spend a lot of money to purchase, and sponsors give them for free. For instance, it cost a great deal of money to owing large area and building a stadium for football teams to practice and compete. If there are no sponsors, there would be fewer high qualities footballers, and football culture may be destroyed. Moreover, players could focus on dedication to sports and have a successful career without being distracted by financial worries.

On the other hand, there are some disadvantages which occur when large sporting events receive sponsoring from companies that produce goods which have negative effects on people and society, like tobacco companies. As an example, if big sports organisations such as World Cup and Olympics utilise Tobacco companies' advertisements, there might be more the young develop a positive association with tobacco through watching these events.

In conclusion, sports sponsoring can have both advantages and disadvantages, however, it is up to the sports organisations to make sure that they do not use sponsored companies, which have a bad influence on people and society.

Votes
Average: 6.1 (2 votes)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, may, moreover, so, for instance, in conclusion, such as, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 13.0 24.0651302605 54% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 41.998997996 69% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1330.0 1615.20841683 82% => OK
No of words: 251.0 315.596192385 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.29880478088 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.98032404683 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92885865897 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 152.0 176.041082164 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.605577689243 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 409.5 506.74238477 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.1756795214 49.4020404114 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.909090909 106.682146367 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.8181818182 20.7667163134 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.90909090909 7.06120827912 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.198215041927 0.244688304435 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0707598739289 0.084324248473 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0663896429032 0.0667982634062 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.126885180634 0.151304729494 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0495911672163 0.056905535591 87% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 13.0946893788 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.76 12.4159519038 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.01 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 78.4519038076 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.

Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...d products for our health and society. On the one hand, many sports teams and p...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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...being distracted by financial worries. On the other hand, there are some disadv...
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...tobacco through watching these events. In conclusion, sports sponsoring can hav...
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...a bad influence on people and society.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, may, moreover, so, for instance, in conclusion, such as, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 13.0 24.0651302605 54% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 41.998997996 69% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1330.0 1615.20841683 82% => OK
No of words: 251.0 315.596192385 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.29880478088 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.98032404683 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92885865897 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 152.0 176.041082164 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.605577689243 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 409.5 506.74238477 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.1756795214 49.4020404114 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.909090909 106.682146367 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.8181818182 20.7667163134 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.90909090909 7.06120827912 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.198215041927 0.244688304435 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0707598739289 0.084324248473 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0663896429032 0.0667982634062 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.126885180634 0.151304729494 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0495911672163 0.056905535591 87% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 13.0946893788 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.76 12.4159519038 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.01 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 78.4519038076 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.

Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.