Some countries achieve international success by building specialized facilities to train top athletes instead of providing sports facilities that everyone can use. Do you think it is a positive or negative development？
In some countries,players with athletic talent receive more support, especially in terms of the specialised facilities they used while the demand of the masses in sports is often ignored. From my perspective, the development of elite sport may bring a range of benefits in the short term, but mass sport is more closely related to the well-being of the public in the long run.
In the short term, it seems sensible to invest on speclialised facilities for some excellent sportsmen when considering the positive impacts brought by these top athletes. From the national level, it is these elites that bring honor in some international competitions and then shape a strong image for their own country. On a individual level, the public will be positively influenced by the sportsmanship revealed by these champions, which will contribute to the improvement of the quality of the whole nation.
However, in the long run, when pondering the essential reason why sports exist, we can find out that the prosperity of mass sports is of more significance and therefore more capital should be allocated to construct facilities that everybody can use. The most fundamental function of sports is to assist people to build a strong body, and in some extent, the more sports facilities there are, the more chances there are for people to take part in sports in their daily life. Another deeper reason is that people can develop a host of valuable qualities such as self-control and perseverance in this process, both of which play an key role on people’s way to achieve success.
So, when comparing the advantages of two sides, I believe this development is a short-sighted approach regarding to sports success. The public are the base of a nation. Only when every ordinary person benefits from the sports facilites, will the development of sports industry be more meaningful.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, may, regarding, so, then, therefore, well, while, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 41.998997996 117% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1584.0 1615.20841683 98% => OK
No of words: 308.0 315.596192385 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.14285714286 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18926351222 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97428116639 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 176.041082164 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.548701298701 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 487.8 506.74238477 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.2975951904 138% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 55.1319978786 49.4020404114 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 144.0 106.682146367 135% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.0 20.7667163134 135% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.81818181818 7.06120827912 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.01903807615 139% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.234804127043 0.244688304435 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.084734453002 0.084324248473 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0470098622312 0.0667982634062 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.134776298096 0.151304729494 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0366180409666 0.056905535591 64% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.8 13.0946893788 128% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 50.2224549098 86% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.83 12.4159519038 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.13 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 78.4519038076 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.1190380762 130% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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