In some countries, advertisers increase the amount of advertising which tries to persuade children to buy snacks, toys, and other goods. Parents object to such pressure on children. But some advertisers claim that there is useful information in their advertisements.
Discuss both views and give your opinions.
In modern civilization, the issue of how digital and commercial development influenced profoundly human lives has becoming a controversy among generations. Some critics claim that the increasing number of advertisements pressurizes children when they are convinced to purchase a host of food, items neither necessary nor desirable. While others debate clearly that the importance of advertising should be taken into account as it involves valuable and practical information for children. However, I utterly support the statement that those exposures pressurize young generations these days.
Initially, some possibilities occurred when promoting advertisement to youngsters in the hedonism. Dominantly, children would be encouraged to adapt and approach new skills within the digital and commercial market such as making rational decisions to ample choices and products surround them. Thus this inevitably boosts the critical thinking in their brain in which makes them more and more creative.
Notwithstanding, the children are regarded as target audiences for those commercial advertising which brings in a multitude of negative effects in the process of their development in the long run. More specifically, young people are assumed to experience a colorful and adventurous journey that would not explore in these virtual and technical environments such as advertising. Therefore, the children could be bombarded with unrealistic campaigns instead of enjoying the simplicity of their childhood by an enormous advertisement launched every single day on social platforms.
All of this being indicated, even though commercial advertisements have brought abundant and ongoing trends through social networking sites, it may result in some detrimental impacts on children if they are obsessed with ample information surrounding. It is justified that educating these generations in a traditional approach such as face-to-face interactions would be more achievable than those in the immediate advertisement. Eventually, I concur with the criticisms that the graphic advertisement pressurize young people or even the subsequent generations.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 293, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, may, so, therefore, thus, while, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1834.0 1615.20841683 114% => OK
No of words: 306.0 315.596192385 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.99346405229 5.12529762239 117% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18244613648 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.29570586259 2.80592935109 117% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 176.041082164 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.627450980392 0.561755894193 112% => OK
syllable_count: 566.1 506.74238477 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.9 1.60771543086 118% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.7461199319 49.4020404114 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 141.076923077 106.682146367 132% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.5384615385 20.7667163134 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.07692307692 7.06120827912 58% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.312524885439 0.244688304435 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.105930364457 0.084324248473 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0804850572025 0.0667982634062 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.189118176791 0.151304729494 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0356582119787 0.056905535591 63% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.6 13.0946893788 142% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 22.75 50.2224549098 45% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 7.44779559118 175% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 11.3001002004 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 17.76 12.4159519038 143% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.45 8.58950901804 122% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 78.4519038076 140% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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