Some countries allow old people to work to any age that they want. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?
In recent years, there are a hotly debated tissue related to whether giving old people the right to work at any age are beneficial or not. Personally, I am inclined to the view that the drawbacks outweigh the merits.
One the other hand, there are merits associated with this policy, one of which is that it enables the old to make end meets. This is because there are some individuals who do not have any descendent to take care of them , plus retirement fee is just a small part of their salary ,hence they can not afford to have a convenient life.
Despite the mentioned merit, I would believe that there are some drawbacks do exist. Firstly, it causes detrimental affect to people’s health. According to scientists, citizens who over 55 years old are more likely to have weaker bones , bad-memory and heart disease, . It is evident that the more older people get, the worse their thinking ability and physical becomes. As a result, this fact have an adverse impact on working performance or even they our health, especially with high-risk job.. Additionally, the old workforce is one of the culprits which leads to the high rate of unemployment. If most companies rolled old worker because of their rich experience, the young who are graduated would miss the boat to finding a new jobs, moreover unemployment is also a concerning phenomenon at present as it results in quite a few bad consequences such as low standard of living, the disparity of the poor and the prosperous.
In conclusion, I would like to reiterate that the drawbacks of allowing old people to work at any age they want is outweigh its advantages because this not only effect their health and decrease productivity but also increase the level of unemployment.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, hence, if, moreover, so, in conclusion, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1439.0 1615.20841683 89% => OK
No of words: 298.0 315.596192385 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.8288590604 5.12529762239 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.15483772266 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74727730452 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 176.041082164 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.60067114094 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 458.1 506.74238477 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 76.4160305317 49.4020404114 155% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.916666667 106.682146367 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.8333333333 20.7667163134 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.25 7.06120827912 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.01903807615 179% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.298484630415 0.244688304435 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0923661033195 0.084324248473 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0882467167003 0.0667982634062 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.193747253084 0.151304729494 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0925807851757 0.056905535591 163% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 13.0946893788 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 50.2224549098 111% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.03 12.4159519038 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.91 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 78.4519038076 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.