In some countries the average weight of people is increasing and their levels of health and fitness is decreasing.
What do you think are the causes of these problems and what measures could be taken to solve them?
Ironically, as the modern medicine is making more and more progress, the average weight of people is increasing while unhealthy habits and lack of fitness in rampant. Furthermore, the wealthier countries with better healthcare seems to be worst affected. This essay will discuss the causes of this problem as well as provide some viable solutions.
The reasons for this health epidemic are many, but firstly we shall discuss unhealthy food. In modern day, the unhealthy food options are sadly cheaper, while healthy organic and fresh produce cost a lot. Because a majority of working class citizens cannot afford to eat healthy, we see a rise in people’s weight and decreased level of fitness. Secondly, sedentary lifestyle has made this situation worse, as all the new technology has hampered our physical activities. Just a few years ago, if somebody wished to see a movie, there was no other way but to go to a cinema. Today we can shop, order food and even do work from our bedrooms, which contributes to this already worsening health epidemic. A study by Harvard School of Medicine showed that sitting in a closed room for more than 8 hours was equivalent of smoking a pack of cigarettes a day. Therefore, cheap unhealthy food and sedentary life style have made people overweight and unfit.
As far as the measure to curb this menace are concerned, they are not too difficult. Firstly, ensuring the availability of healthy food products at a reasonable price would encourage people to eat healthy. This is the reason people enjoy much better quality of life in places that have abundance of fresh fruit, vegetables and farm raised meat products. Secondly, although food is important, regular exercise is still the key to achieve a good level of fitness and healthiness. A recent research by an English university revealed that people who ate healthy and worked out were less likely to get Alzheimer’s or other diseases in their old age. Hence, eating healthy and working out regularly is key to solving this issue.
In conclusion, I believe that bad habits and lack of exercise causes people to become over weight, while good food and regular workout is the solution for this.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, furthermore, hence, if, second, secondly, so, still, therefore, well, while, in conclusion, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 10.4138276553 154% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1834.0 1615.20841683 114% => OK
No of words: 367.0 315.596192385 116% => OK
Chars per words: 4.99727520436 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37689890912 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67419778877 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 224.0 176.041082164 127% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.610354223433 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 578.7 506.74238477 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 8.0 2.10420841683 380% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 29.2956934433 49.4020404114 59% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 101.888888889 106.682146367 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.3888888889 20.7667163134 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.83333333333 7.06120827912 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.9879759519 251% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.14243531158 0.244688304435 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0412664915436 0.084324248473 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0331092790713 0.0667982634062 50% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0950385032161 0.151304729494 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.046713647146 0.056905535591 82% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 13.0946893788 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.72 12.4159519038 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.97 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 78.4519038076 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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