in some countries the average weight of people is increasing and their level of health and fitness are decreasing, what do you think are the causes of these problems and what measures could be taken to solve them ?

The weight of people in many countries is rising while their physique is diminishing. In my opinion, improper food habits, lack of exercise, and the environment are the main culprit of this issue. I also believe that the regular maintenance of our lifestyle may help us to get rid of this.

Health is a very sensitive matter and without proper take care, it may lose its shape. It is often said that health is wealth and it is the root of happiness. A person's health depends on many aspects and any failure of them will result in diseases like overweight. For instance, if a person does not regulate his diet, this may raise the level of cholesterol and sugar in his blood and in the long run, it will cause many illnesses such as obesity, heart problem, diabetics, etc. Moreover, the atmosphere also plays a vital role in a person's body condition. Nowadays, our nature is full of dust which makes our lungs more vulnerable than before. Thus, the mentioned factors are the main reason for the increment of the heft of a person and the decrement of fitness as well.

Though the world is getting tougher day by day, it is necessary to follow a routine to live well in the earth. Regular exercise is an excellent way to keep our body fit. It helps to reduce the extra fat from the body by burning them out and lower the weight as a consequence. Though drill is necessary to remain the body fit, it won't be possible to achieve without a controlled habit of food. Think about a person who does all the hard work in the gym but does not care about his meal. It is quite difficult for that person to gain healthy fitness. Furthermore, limited ingestion also helps to stay away from many sicknesses. Hence, by following the above tactics, it will be possible to secure a healthy life.

To conclude, the weight will go up as the people grow older, but if the increasing rate is not constant then it will be the cause of several health manifestations. But with the assist of a balanced diet and proper exercise, a healthy life can be achieved.

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'lose' (= miss, waste, suffer the loss etc.)?
Suggestion: lose
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Suggestion: persons'; person's
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Message: Possible agreement error. The noun illness seems to be countable; consider using: 'many illnesses'.
Suggestion: many illnesses
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Message: Possible agreement error. The noun sickness seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'much sickness', 'a good deal of sickness'.
Suggestion: much sickness; a good deal of sickness
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, hence, if, may, moreover, so, then, thus, well, while, for instance, such as, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 13.1623246493 144% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 41.998997996 119% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1657.0 1615.20841683 103% => OK
No of words: 367.0 315.596192385 116% => OK
Chars per words: 4.51498637602 5.12529762239 88% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37689890912 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49010842994 2.80592935109 89% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 176.041082164 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.566757493188 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 522.9 506.74238477 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 5.43587174349 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 16.0721442886 124% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.9785226283 49.4020404114 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.85 106.682146367 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.35 20.7667163134 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.75 7.06120827912 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.140500232873 0.244688304435 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0375792865832 0.084324248473 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0434997480656 0.0667982634062 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0870415825888 0.151304729494 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0280701991542 0.056905535591 49% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.0 13.0946893788 69% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 50.2224549098 140% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 11.3001002004 70% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.88 12.4159519038 72% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.58 8.58950901804 88% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 78.4519038076 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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