In some countries the average weight of people is increasing and their levels of health and fitness are decreasing.gh
What do you think are the causes of these problems and what measures could be taken to solve them?
Nowadays, health problems have become more common among people in many areas, which leads to the rise of their average weight as well as the decline of their fitness. In my opinion, there are plenty of reasons for this situation, which I will discuss in this essay and then suggest some solutions.
First of all, it seems clear that the development of technology is one of the most important causes. Since its appearance, many jobs and industries have been changed into a new form which require fewer manual labours but more white-collar workers. Another reason is the introduction of fastfood in the last few decades, which has adjusted the eating habits of most people. Although no one can deny its convenience and dominance, fastfood is a potential source of harm to the health as it contains a great amount of fat and sugar as well as other toxic substances. Moreover, today lifestyle has significantly changed because of many new kinds of entertainment such as games, bars and so on, which means people can now spend time on numerous activities instead of sleeping and eating on time.
These issues have been so serious that in some countries, the government has suggested many measures to solve them. One of these is to improve citizens' awareness of a healthy lifestyle and decrease the use of fastfood and alcohol. In addition, people can be encouraged to take regular exercises to keep fit and healthy by provision of access to suitable facilities and equipments. It is also considerable to search for another kind of food which is both convenient and health-protected.
All things considered, I firmly believed that the development of technology, fastfood industry and entertainment is the basic reason for the increase of average weight. Solving these problems needs the effort of all the countries involved to decrease the consumption of mentioned products as well as improve the health state by exercises.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 739, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...hich means people can now spend time on a large number of activities instead of sleeping and eati...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, moreover, so, then, well, in addition, kind of, such as, as well as, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1622.0 1615.20841683 100% => OK
No of words: 322.0 315.596192385 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.03726708075 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23607819155 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85900560396 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 176.041082164 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.571428571429 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 507.6 506.74238477 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 45.5850852802 49.4020404114 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 135.166666667 106.682146367 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.8333333333 20.7667163134 129% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.83333333333 7.06120827912 139% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.19203834013 0.244688304435 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0677668059191 0.084324248473 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0590844056901 0.0667982634062 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.125674307999 0.151304729494 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0586773772955 0.056905535591 103% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.7 13.0946893788 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 50.2224549098 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.25 12.4159519038 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.09 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 78.4519038076 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 9.78957915832 138% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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