In some cultures children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message

Essay topics:

In some cultures, children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough.

What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message?

Education always has controversial issues involving its methods and standards, sometimes including cultural differences. Many people argue that teaching young children that effort is the key for every achievements can help them build up a vibrant personality while others believe it can bring plenty of negative effects.

On the one hand, some cultures consider attempt as the first-needed quality and want every generations to obtain it. It is a common belief that this kind of messages can draw in their mind a basic foundation of a social member. Children can be more positive to deal with failures and dare to dream as well as achieve their ambitions. In many case, trying hard is an essential factor of a successful person as nothing is easy to obtain.

On the other hand, many people claim that trying hard is not the only quality needed for children. This kind of education, however, can put in them wrong opinions of dealing with things and how to achieve their goals. They may become idealistic dreamers who always try to obtain an unbelievable results and cannot evaluate things in many aspects. Sometimes, they give no care to risks and challenges that they may encounter and put the others in difficult situations. It is also means these children are more conventional because they are easy to be disappointed and lose the ability to dream and cope with problems.

All things considered, I firmly believe that there are other approaches to educated a child about efforts. We should help them have a both positive and realistic vision of their life.

Votes
Average: 7.3 (2 votes)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 338, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun case seems to be countable; consider using: 'many cases'.
Suggestion: many cases
... as well as achieve their ambitions. In many case, trying hard is an essential factor of ...
^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, may, so, well, while, kind of, as well as, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 41.998997996 69% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1308.0 1615.20841683 81% => OK
No of words: 262.0 315.596192385 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.99236641221 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.02323427807 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68815035333 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 159.0 176.041082164 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.606870229008 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 407.7 506.74238477 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 28.2756926157 49.4020404114 57% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 100.615384615 106.682146367 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1538461538 20.7667163134 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.61538461538 7.06120827912 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.261782362634 0.244688304435 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0804218742859 0.084324248473 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0464107718241 0.0667982634062 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.134090100118 0.151304729494 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0909227661991 0.056905535591 160% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 13.0946893788 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.66 12.4159519038 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.79 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 78.4519038076 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 338, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun case seems to be countable; consider using: 'many cases'.
Suggestion: many cases
... as well as achieve their ambitions. In many case, trying hard is an essential factor of ...
^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, may, so, well, while, kind of, as well as, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 41.998997996 69% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1308.0 1615.20841683 81% => OK
No of words: 262.0 315.596192385 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.99236641221 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.02323427807 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68815035333 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 159.0 176.041082164 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.606870229008 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 407.7 506.74238477 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 28.2756926157 49.4020404114 57% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 100.615384615 106.682146367 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1538461538 20.7667163134 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.61538461538 7.06120827912 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.261782362634 0.244688304435 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0804218742859 0.084324248473 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0464107718241 0.0667982634062 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.134090100118 0.151304729494 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0909227661991 0.056905535591 160% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 13.0946893788 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.66 12.4159519038 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.79 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 78.4519038076 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.