Zoos are sometimes seen as necessary but not poor alternatives to a natural environment. Discuss some of the arguments for and/or against keeping animals in zoos.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Write at least 250 words.
Nowadays, more animals are taken away from their natural habitats to live their lifelong in zoos. Although it is a common belief that zoos are the best places for these animal to survive, others argue that it prevent them from growing up as a real wild animal. In this essay, I will discuss both views and give my own opinion.
First of all, it is undeniable that keeping animals in zoos seems advantageous for them due to the fact that they can grow up in a safer and healthier environment, where their food and physical performance are checked and evaluated regularly. Compared to wild animals living in natural habitats, there is higher possibility for animals in zoos to survive until their adulthood. Moreover, zoos are established not only to benefit animals themselves but also human. It is evident that in these days, zoos are used for education and tourism as well. Many people believe that seeing and touching the real animals is a completely different experience from watching them on TV. Therefore, visiting the zoos, in their opinion, not only helps children have more skills to deal with the animals on their own but also improve their love for the nature. In addition, on the economical point of view, the operation of zoos in many countries has brought a great deal of profit to national budget in recent years and played an important role in the tourism of some areas.
On the other hand, it is generally believed that the advantages of zoos cannot outweigh their withdraws for several reasons. The main one is that not all the zoos have enough facilities and conditions to keep these animals in their best performance. In some places, people simply put these species in cages and feed them one or two basic meals a day to keep them alive so that the zoos can continue to operate and make profit from visitors. Another problem with zoos is that the animals grown there have so limited skills to survive in the wild because they are provided with everything to support their life. It means that they have no choice but keep these animals in zoos all their life, which makes the preservation purpose nonsense as they cannot return to their natural habitat.
All things considered, keeping animals in zoos has plenty of advantages as well as disadvantages. However, I firmly support that we should only put some endangered species in zoos and let the others to live in the wild because it is more efficient to improve laws on banning animals hunting than to keep an eye on them all the time.
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... outweigh their withdraws. It is mostly because of the fact that not all the zoos have enough facilities...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, moreover, so, therefore, well, in addition, as well as, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 7.30460921844 192% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 24.0651302605 220% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 61.0 41.998997996 145% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2067.0 1615.20841683 128% => OK
No of words: 438.0 315.596192385 139% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.71917808219 5.12529762239 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57476223824 4.20363070211 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.44474071363 2.80592935109 87% => OK
Unique words: 214.0 176.041082164 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.488584474886 0.561755894193 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 656.1 506.74238477 129% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 52.7467672307 49.4020404114 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.588235294 106.682146367 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.7647058824 20.7667163134 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.94117647059 7.06120827912 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.215091635819 0.244688304435 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.084446452931 0.084324248473 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0326534541666 0.0667982634062 49% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.148031886535 0.151304729494 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0217213244875 0.056905535591 38% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 13.0946893788 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 50.2224549098 109% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.39 12.4159519038 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.34 8.58950901804 97% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 78.4519038076 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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